TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes. How animals manage to migrate long distances is often puzzling. In the case of humpback whales, we may have found the answer: the

According to the passage, humpack whales may be navigating by the stars and migrate longer distances. But, the lecturer puts doubt on it and thinks this concept of navigating through the stars is unconvincing.

Firstly, the passage claims that the humpack whales are intelligent enough to use stars to navigate by. Also, the brain power of whales' far exceed most of the animals. They can navigate by stars because they are intelligent enough for it. However, the lecturer states that there is no relation between the intelligence and use of stars. He gives example of dogs. They are not as much intelligent as whales but they sometimes navigate by the stars. So the intelligence and use of stars are not likely to be connected.

Secondly, the passage states that humpack whales relay on stars at night to provide them with the external signs by which to maintain direction over longer distances. But, according to the lecturer the animals sense or feel the external objects or forces. According to the experiment, the humpack whale senses the magnatic field. It is able do it because of biomagnatic part in the body.

Finally, the passage states that the function of spy-humping in whales is that they are looking at the stars which provides them information about the directions. They sometimes seems to be floating straight up for minutes at a time. To contradict, the lecturer says that the spy-humping is very rare. Shark often do hunting during the day time without the help of stars.

To conclude, the passage provides various facts and behaviors of humpack whales to prove that they use stars for navigation. But, the lecturer gives counter explanation of it and provides some other facts about humpack whales.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...on about the directions. They sometimes seems to be floating straight up for minutes ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he day time without the help of stars. To conclude, the passage provides variou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, look, may, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 288.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00694444444 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63478298999 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479166666667 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6226410988 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8947368421 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1578947368 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440483818996 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138631611629 0.0996497079465 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100896108301 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242383806217 0.162205337803 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693992778844 0.0443174109184 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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