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In this set of material, the article and the lecture disagree on the merit of the negative impact of Zebra mussel shellfish on the North American coastal water. The reading passage states that the invasion of those Zebra Mussel fish is uncontrollable and causes dramatic danger to the native fish population in North America. The writer in reading passage postulates three consequences from those new threaten fish there. He thinks that the humans' vessels helped those species to spread from European coast to American coast. Also, the real domination without any predators enhances the proliferation of the Zebra mussel fish. And, the invasion of those fish competes with the native fish on the food resources putting them in great danger. In contrary, the professor in the lecture challenges the reading passage and presents three counterclaims proving that all the consequences of the passage are controllable and the threat of the zebrafish is skeptical. Following are brief interpretation to this perspective.
First of all, the author asserts that the ability of those zebrafish to attach themselves to the ships and vessels which carry some of the European coastal water causes the spread of those species since the eighteenth century. However, the professor refutes this idea. He believes that it is true the reansportation was uncontrolled in the past. But, people nowadays have satisfactory progress in their knowledge. They develop a way that helped that cargo in emptying their water at the ocean before reaching the American cost which in turn the salty water of the sea kills most of the zebra fish before reaching American water.
Second, the reading passage claims that those fish once reach the coastal water of American dominate their new habitatite because of no predators which causes high and danger level of population growth in the area. Nevertheless, the lecturer rebuffs this point, too. He says that it is odd to think those zebra fish enjoy their new habitate without any predators. In fact, as they moved and florurnish, the sea brids change their food and test the new preys. As a result, the level of those zebra mussels undercontrol.
Last but not the least, the reading passage argues that those fish feed on plankoten and compete with native fish on the food resources putting the native creatures endanger. Antithesis to this theory, the professor opposes this urguments. He believes that even though they compete with other plankoten eater marrin animals, they help other generation of non plankoten feeders from the bottom of the sea and cause helpful progress in their population.
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the level of those zebra mussels undercontrol.
the level of those zebra mussels is under control.
putting the native creatures endanger.
putting the native creatures in danger.
Definitions of endanger
verb
put (someone or something) at risk or in danger.
he was driving in a manner likely to endanger life
synonyms: imperil, jeopardize, risk, put at risk, put in danger, expose to danger, threaten, pose a
they help other generation of non plankoten feeders
they help other generations of non plankoten feeders
Sentence: He believes that it is true the reansportation was uncontrolled in the past.
Error: reansportation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Second, the reading passage claims that those fish once reach the coastal water of American dominate their new habitatite because of no predators which causes high and danger level of population growth in the area.
Error: habitatite Suggestion: habitation
Sentence: He says that it is odd to think those zebra fish enjoy their new habitate without any predators.
Error: habitate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In fact, as they moved and florurnish, the sea brids change their food and test the new preys.
Error: florurnish Suggestion: flourish
Error: brids Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a result, the level of those zebra mussels undercontrol.
Error: undercontrol Suggestion: under control
Sentence: Antithesis to this theory, the professor opposes this urguments.
Error: urguments Suggestion: arguments
Sentence: He believes that even though they compete with other plankoten eater marrin animals, they help other generation of non plankoten feeders from the bottom of the sea and cause helpful progress in their population.
Error: marrin Suggestion: ?
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2 //leave some minutes check out spellings. don't need that much content
No. of Words: 425 250 //Write the essay in 20 minutes. The introduction is too long. Read sample essays from ETS and see how they develop the introduction :
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 21 12
No. of Words: 425 250
No. of Characters: 2153 1200
No. of Different Words: 199 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.066 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.818 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this zebrafish' or ''?
Suggestion: this zebrafish;
... the author asserts that the ability of those zebrafish to attach themselves to the ships and v...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 128, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...es to the ships and vessels which carry some of the European coastal water causes the sprea...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...brids change their food and test the new preys. As a result, the level of those z...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, in fact, as a result, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 22.412803532 201% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 30.3222958057 195% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1373.03311258 160% => OK
No of words: 425.0 270.72406181 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16705882353 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62703537831 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 419.366225166 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.554792309 49.2860985944 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320513608557 0.272083759551 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927114544409 0.0996497079465 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698492556554 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193595527358 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632292374141 0.0443174109184 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 63.6247240618 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.