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In this set of material, the article and the lecture disagree on the merit of whether the skeleton fossils of Sinosauropteryx dinosaur which preserved in the volcanic ash contained a regular pattern of lines which surrounded the bones of that extinct animal; actually, represents feathers or not. The reading passage states that some paleontologists think that dinosaur did not have feathers. In fact, those lines represented decomposed fibers of the skin, also could be frills, and the location of those lines are an inappropriate location for supporting fly to that animal. In contrary, the professor in the lecture challenges this theory. He presents three counterclaims proving that all the reading passage critics are skeptical. Following is a brief interpretation to this perspective.
First of all, the author claims that those fine lines probably decomposed skin formed after the death of that dinosaur when buried in the volcanic ash. However, the professor in the listening lecture refutes this suggestion. He believes that it is unlikely to find any decomposed skin fibers for other fossilized animals in the same location. In fact, they were well preserved, and all of their skin structure did not transform to fibers. Therefore, it was not strong evidence.
Second, the writer in the passage asserts that this dinosaur had some frills; ornamental; fan -shaped structures. Nevertheless, the lecturer rebuffs this idea, too. He pinpoints that the chemical structure of the frills is utterly different from the chemical structure of the feathers. Furthermore, after chemical analysis of those lines, the scientists discovered they formed from Beta, carotene protein which is the structure of the feathers, not the frills. Thus, it was not a very good suggestion from the writer.
Last but not the least, the reading passage argues that the location of those lines were in a position did not allow them to play any role or assistance for flying. Whereas, the professor opposes this argument and states that it is a necessary for those feathers to help that dinosaur in flying. He gave an example of the peacock bird which has wonderful, colorful feathers in the back that display in attracting the females for mating and does not help them in flying. Also, after careful analysis of those lines, it shows that there were orange and white; So they were colorful feathers.
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Essay evaluation report
the article and the lecture disagree on the merit of whether the skeleton fossils of Sinosauropteryx dinosaur which preserved in the volcanic ash contained a regular pattern of lines which surrounded the bones of that extinct animal; actually, represents feathers or not.
Description: The sentence is too long, which is hard to read.
the author claims that those fine lines probably decomposed skin formed after the death
the author claims that those fine lines are probably decomposed skins formed after the death
the scientists discovered they formed from Beta, carotene protein
the scientists discovered they are formed from Beta, carotene protein
the location of those lines were in a position did not allow them to play any role //two verbs in one sentence
the location of those lines were in a position not allowing them to play any role
the location of those lines which were in a position did not allow them to play any role
flaws:
1.No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
You have grammatical issues on verbs.
2.No. of Words: 385 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Don't need those details in introduction:
In fact, those lines represented decomposed fibers of the skin, also could be frills, and the location of those lines are an inappropriate location for supporting fly to that animal.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 12
No. of Words: 385 250
No. of Characters: 1943 1200
No. of Different Words: 178 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.047 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.679 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.074 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.297 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 22.412803532 196% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1373.03311258 146% => OK
No of words: 385.0 270.72406181 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19480519481 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77247147456 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 145.348785872 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498701298701 0.540411800872 92% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4745954169 49.2860985944 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 7.06452816374 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384247517459 0.272083759551 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961558483701 0.0996497079465 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642362941836 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222554822377 0.162205337803 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666178422085 0.0443174109184 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 63.6247240618 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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