Extreme sports like skiing rafting diving should be banned Agree or disagree

These days, there is a controversial debate between members of society about the impacts of extreme sports. There are a great number of people who interpret the impacts of these sports as thoroughly constructive, while others hold an opponent view. I am inclined to believe that extreme sports are beneficial and should be promoted.

There are several reasons why dangerous sports are advantageous. First of all, it is argued that such sports play a pivotal role in creating adroit people. This is attributed to the fact that these types of sports could relieve the stress of a person after hectic hours of work time; therefore they would create a feeling of accomplishment and confidence, which consequently open avenues toward new achievements so that the person’s enthusiasm and determination would be amplified toward many daunting tasks. Take bungee jumping for example, even those with a myriad of predicaments would purge their thoughts and vent their feelings after one round of jumping.

In addition, it is claimed that some traits such as overcoming fear and remaining concentrated at high speed would not be achieved by other sports. This is to say that extreme sports provide an opportunity for an individual to work on those talents that may not become of use in regular situations, which would instill a strong feeling of self-esteem so that they are more likely to perform up to expectations in society. Specifically, a research study conducted at Yale university found that extreme sports could enhance a person’s intellectual abilities to make decisions related to social and personal.

In conclusion, the foregoing discussion propounded the view that dangerous sports enhance the mental and physical healthiness of an individual and increase the person’s confidence. It is expected that the administrations take cognizance of these facts and begin to adopt these sports among the young generation.

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Average: 9.6 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 31.9359605911 135% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1207.87684729 136% => OK
No of words: 305.0 242.827586207 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36721311475 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0517457919 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 139.433497537 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596721311475 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 379.143842365 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.325123152709 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.2977099438 50.4703680194 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.416666667 104.977214359 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.9669160288 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.25397266985 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159900563689 0.242375264174 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648770206998 0.0925447433944 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605689255433 0.071462118173 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993820307946 0.151781067708 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427988637706 0.0609392437508 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 12.6369458128 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 55.0591133005 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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