Some people think the purpose of education is to prepare the future workforce and make good members of society. Others think the purpose of education should lead to self-fulfillment. What is your opinion?

In recent years, whether the primary purpose of education is to prepare individuals to enter the workforce or to fulfill their dreams has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the main reason of being educated is to secure a good job, such issue is regarded thoroughly as both positive and constructive by a number of individuals. In my opinion, I am inclined to believe that the fundamental purpose of education is to prepare people to contribute to the society while achieving their personal goals and careers, and I will elaborate in the following essay.

To begin with, government provides citizens education in return for their skills and knowledge to help build and develop the society. Students are encouraged to participated in various workshops, activities and socials in school to increase the knowledge in different aspects of lives. According to one of my survey which I conducted in university, 89% of countries that provide citizens basic education to high school becomes developing countries about ten years. Thus, education provides a nation with skilled and innovative citizens for different occupations that contributes toward a better society.

On the other hand, achieving personal goals and ambitious through education fulfill individuals’ needs which play essential parts in their lives. With the increased belief in individualism, the purpose of education aims at helping one achieve their dreams and realize their talents. For instance, courses such as music, art and performance have almost the same amount of people attending comparing with engineering, science and mechanics. Hence, people in developed countries tend to focus on their passions instead of aiming to get a good job in the future.

In conclusion, education prepares one to enter the workforce with valuable knowledge and skills while also fulfilling one’s needs and helping one achieve their dreams.

Votes
Average: 7.7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.5418719212 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 6.10837438424 16% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 8.36945812808 167% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 31.9359605911 166% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.75862068966 208% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1207.87684729 135% => OK
No of words: 299.0 242.827586207 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45484949833 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94235319268 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 139.433497537 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558528428094 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 379.143842365 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.6157635468 22% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.6340168794 50.4703680194 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 135.916666667 104.977214359 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.9669160288 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.25397266985 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196519384467 0.242375264174 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768668671333 0.0925447433944 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473171840757 0.071462118173 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124301036404 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585209989314 0.0609392437508 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 12.6369458128 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 53.1260098522 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.9458128079 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 11.5310837438 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 55.0591133005 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.94827586207 146% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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