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In order to succeed in life, we should set a goal or a target for ourselves. If we get distracted or are not focussed towards our goal by getting engulfed in vice doings or diverting from our path of success, we might end up failing. Lance Armstrong was proved guilty of doping and was stripped off all his titles. in the shakespeares tempest ; prospero , the duke of milan,after gaining power got distracted by magic and did not peroform his rightful duties which led to his brother usurping his throne. both the above instances demonstrate that being focussed is vital part of success.

Lance Armstrong, a famous cyclist, failed four drug tests in 1998s Tour De France . the anti-doping corporation accused him for doping that included consumption of drugs to fool authorities. he was stripped off his seven tour de france titles and all his awards and prohibited from professional cycling for life. All his life time success and achievement were converted to failure and disappointment. Doing bad deeds does good to nobody and taking shortcuts in life often leads to failure .

In the early years of world war II, hitler waned to capture and take control over british. He made a strategy called the “blitz”. For days there was lot of bombing and troops in british. He continued to do so for british to surrender . side by side he send troops to Russia to capture it too. This gave the british people time to recharge,replenish and fight back. if hitler had focussed on defeating the british and not getting engulfed in conquering Russia side by side,british would have surrendered and he would be succeded in his doings.

Success is consists of ups and downs. when experiencing success concentrating and focussing and sticking to their main intentions is necessary. By choosing the wrong path ,like lance Armstrong, or not being focussed on goal ,like adolf hitler; ones story of success turns into a complete failure.

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Sentence: Success is consists of ups and downs. when experiencing success concentrating and focussing and sticking to their main intentions is necessary.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to is and consists

Sentence: Lance Armstrong was proved guilty of doping and was stripped off all his titles. in the shakespeares tempest ; prospero , the duke of milan,after gaining power got distracted by magic and did not peroform his rightful duties which led to his brother usurping his throne. both the above instances demonstrate that being focussed is vital part of success.
Error: peroform Suggestion: perform

Sentence: This gave the british people time to recharge,replenish and fight back. if hitler had focussed on defeating the british and not getting engulfed in conquering Russia side by side,british would have surrendered and he would be succeded in his doings.
Error: succeded Suggestion: succeed

Sentence: Success is consists of ups and downs. when experiencing success concentrating and focussing and sticking to their main intentions is necessary.
Error: focussing Suggestion: No alternate word

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not 'british' but 'British'

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