A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Although a lot of artistic people partially believe that economic supports in this realm should have been allocated by governments more than environment field, it seems to me that since the latter arena and its problems include much more critical debates, the financial supports must run for environment and its improvements. Why, then, have biologic systems accentuated among other governmental problems? The reason this has bolded by a plenty of pensive should seek through priorities of whole nations for meeting a similar goal, and generality of environment’s debates in comparison with artist ones on which the next paragraphs will elaborate.

To begin with, human essentials’ most significant requirements is its health. Fewer people admit that art is prior to health. It is an acceptable fact. Therefore, if air, which is of the clear examples of ecosystem, threatens by peril and dearth, as a definite result, human’s health will face with danger. Before fulfilling of requirements for cleanse of space, artists like other human being will deprive from work in an appropriate space; will not be able to blossom their talents; and will not be able to even breathe. Wonder this connection between health and environment though is a simple connection but always ignore by governmental agents. Had they attended to such fact, the problem of air pollution would have solved years before.

Additionally, air that once was thought not having special concerns of nations changing approach is noticeable. For example, several decades ago, realm of ecosystems even did not exist in financial division of governments; however, because of releasing too much toxic gas to the atmosphere, human perceived that ignoring this realm will cost to his health. Therefore, experts tried to compensate men’s wrongs, by developing the parks, not cutting the trees and improving the politics. Of course, all mentioned measurements include the artist purposes so that harnessing the air pollution specifically would beautify the countenance of the sculptures, architecture buildings and paintings in every city.

All in all, to put the issue into a nut shell, allocating budget to environments has by far more preference to art field due to preponderance of health and existence of similarities in which both art and environments close.

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