A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and
disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

Personally, I agree with the assertion that a company's wishes of building a large factory near my community. For me, it means greater job opportunity, economical and will be helpful to fulfill my dream of becoming a shareholder of the large company and invest its profit on education.

To begin with, I think that large factory near my community would open more jobs for the resident nearby factory; me and residents of my community will get more job opportunities.When I get good job opportunity , it will eventually improve my economical status and change my living stander. Also my children will get proper chance of getting study in good school and my family status will upgrade in the society which I am looking for.

In addition to job opportunity, large factory near my community will support me by reducing my expense on gasoline when going to purchase necessary things for my daily living.By way of example, my friend Gita has saved a lot more money because of living in the nearby area of Wallmart now. Her expense on gasoline was a lot more than now when she lived far from the market in previous years.

Finally, in combination with job opportunity and inexpensive for shopping, I feel that large factory will help to become a shareholder and invest my money for the better improvement of the large company. Because , I have a dream that some day when I earn some extra money and that money I will invest in the larger company; get some profit from it and that profit I can utilize in my daughter's education.

IN considering large company near my community and economical benefit, I have explored the issues of job opportunity, save money by not using more gasoline and earn more money from investing in the large company and profit investment in education. These factors lead me personally agree with the idea of building large company nearby my community.

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me and residents of my community will get more job opportunities.
Residents of my community and I will get more job opportunities.

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