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The professor in the lecture refutes the claim made by the reading passage. The passage says that the policy offering four days work week and eighty percent of their curent pay to its employees would be beneficial for the country, the employees as well as the company. The professor rejects the claim made by the passage.

The passage says that a four day work week would prove to be more profitable to the company. They would not make major mistakes in their work since they would be at peace and more alert. Also the companies could easily hire new staff so that they could have fewer error prone...

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Sentence: The passage says that the policy offering four days work week and eighty percent of their curent pay to its employees would be beneficial for the country, the employees as well as the company.
Error: curent Suggestion: current

Sentence: Also the companies could easily hire new staff so that they could have fewer error prone employees and would also not have to spend more money since the four day employees would recieve only eighty percent of their current pay.
Error: recieve Suggestion: receive

Sentence: The professor rejects this claim by saying that this kind of a policy would infact prove to be deleterious to the company.
Error: infact Suggestion: in fact

Sentence: Also the new workers will need medicla benefits.
Error: medicla Suggestion: medical

Sentence: Even though the pay of each employee is reduced, but the medical facilities cannot be reduced and hence if the company hires new employess it will end up spending more.
Error: employess Suggestion: employers

Sentence: Secondly, the passage says that the country's economy would increase as new jobs would be created and would reduce the unemployement rates.
Error: unemployement Suggestion: unemployment

Sentence: Finally the passage claims that it would increase the quality of life of the employees and they would have more leasure time.
Error: leasure Suggestion: No alternate word

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No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Words: 427 250 (make sure you write the essay in 20 minutes)

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 18 9
No. of Words: 427 250
No. of Characters: 2026 1200
No. of Different Words: 170 120
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.745 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.216 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.654 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4