IF U COULD CHANGE ONE THING IN YOUR HOMETOWN,, WHAT WOULD U CHANGE.USE REASONS AND EXAMPLES

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IF U COULD CHANGE ONE THING IN YOUR HOMETOWN,, WHAT WOULD U CHANGE.USE REASONS AND EXAMPLES

Water is the an important resource in our day to day life. I live in a small town near nalgonda where the water supply is not good. If I have got the chance to change the one thing about my hometown I would like to change water resources and provide better supplies of water and I got certain reasons to support my opinion.

Firstly, pure water supply is very important for the health of the people. Water in my hometown is highly flouridated and residents are suffering from many bone and tooth diseases because of this flouridated water. By supply of pure water, we can reduce the incidence of diseases in people. For example, my sister was suffering from flourosis, which affected her teeth and made her bones fragile. If my hometown have a good water supply, she would not have been affected by this disease.

Secondly, there is a shortage of water supply too in my hometown because of lack of rains. Many plants and animals are dying because of lack of water in peak summers and even people are migrating to other places. Less water supply affecting the agriculture and human life. We can reduce this problem to some extent by building canals and store the rain water and there by improve the water resources. If there is a good water supply, agriculture would have been developed and in turn achieves the prosporous nation. For example, many people depends on agriculture and they raise various crops. Because of shortage of water, many farmers have committed suicide because of losses in agriculture.

To conclude, because of above reasons I would like to change the water supply and improve water resources in my hometown.

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Sentence: Water is the an important resource in our day to day life.
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Sentence: Water in my hometown is highly flouridated and residents are suffering from many bone and tooth diseases because of this flouridated water.
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Sentence: If there is a good water supply, agriculture would have been developed and in turn achieves the prosporous nation.
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