INtegrated essay from official guide to toefl test ETS. "Appearance of professors on television"
The reading states that professor’s appearance on television gives more benefits to themselves, to universities and to the public. But, the lecture explains no one benefits from this appearance on television. Lecture cast doubt on the reading in following ways.
In lecture, professor explains that it’s not good to the professor to appear on screen because, people will thought that professor is not a serious scholar and he is just a entertiner. It will damage the reputation of that professor. This strongly opposes the reading which states that professors gets benefits by attaining reput...
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Sentence: This strongly opposes the reading which states that professors gets benefits by attaining reputation and he can share his ideas to large members.
Description: The fragment professors gets benefits is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace gets with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: This contradicts the statements in reading that by participating in television shows, university become more popular.
Description: The fragment university become more is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace become with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: In lecture, professor explains that it's not good to the professor to appear on screen because, people will thought that professor is not a serious scholar and he is just a entertiner.
Error: entertiner Suggestion: entertainer
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Score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
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Average Word Length: 5.022 4.6
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