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The article states that schools in the United States have borrowed the Europian system of the school organisations, a system that seperates students into grades by chronical age and provide three reasons to support. However, the professor explain that it is not a good idea and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that primary education includes grades 1 to 5 or 6. The professor refutes the point by saying that each student have different mental and physical strength. He states that some student joins the school at their 5th or 6th birthday, but some do it earlier or later according to their strength.
Second, the article posits that intermediate education begins from 6 or 7 and offer three years of instruction. However, the professor says that teen have different physical and social differences according to whether they are a girl or a boy. He staes that both girl and boy have different maturity.
Third the reading says that at grade 9 or 10 secondary school begins. The professor opposes this point by explaining that repeatation an entire year for a dropout make them to study those subjects also in which they are good. Also, he states that by grading system, the fast student have to wait for slow students to grass up the course And the slow students, which need more time to study a topic may have to study fast to cover up with the class.
Sentence: However, the professor explain that it is not a good idea and refutes each of the author's reasons.
Description: The fragment professor explain that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace explain with verb, past tense
He states that some student joins the school
He states that some students join the school
each student have different mental
each student has different mental
Sentence: The article states that schools in the United States have borrowed the Europian system of the school organisations, a system that seperates students into grades by chronical age and provide three reasons to support.
Error: chronical Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: seperates Suggestion: separates
Sentence: The professor opposes this point by explaining that repeatation an entire year for a dropout make them to study those subjects also in which they are good.
Error: repeatation Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 241 250
No. of Characters: 1124 1200
No. of Different Words: 131 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.94 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.664 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.424 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.624 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4