Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give reason for your position.

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Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give reason for your position.

If I make a lot of money it would be possible for me to provide better living standards for my family and many facilities. In addition, I can afford to send my children to better schools where they can catch up with many opportunities and opt for many activities which are costly. Furthermore, when I go out on tours and fun with my family I can enjoy to the fullest by staying in five star hotels and eating in five star restaurants and also enjoying the expensive rides.

On the hand if I live a comfortable life, I would be able to spend time with my family and discussing various things which important for the future. I would live my life peacefully without the pressure or stress of the workload. In addition, I would take out time for things like exercise, playing, practising my hobby because that would help me to remain fit and healthy. I would spend more time with my children and involve with them by helping them doing their homework and nurturing them.

Although, making lot of money has a lot of advantages, but I would like to live a comfortable life rather living a stressful life because life is not only about earning lot money it’s all about earning that much that is needed to live a happy and contempt life and I would like to spend time with my family rather spending money on them.

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Sentence: On the hand if I live a comfortable life, I would be able to spend time with my family and discussing various things which important for the future.
Description: The fragment which important for is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace important with adverb

Sentence: In addition, I would take out time for things like exercise, playing, practising my hobby because that would help me to remain fit and healthy.
Error: practising Suggestion: practicing

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No. of Words: 240 350
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5

Minimum 250 words wanted.

better to have 5 paragraphs:

para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion

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Score: 15 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 240 350
No. of Characters: 1048 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.936 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.367 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.408 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 43 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.133 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.5 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.674 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.223 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5