Messy people are not as successful in life as the ones who are neat and clean. Do you agree with this statement?
There are many definitions about “what is a successful man?” Some people said that “messy people are not as successful in life as the ones who are neat and clean” I strongly agree whit this statement because of two reasons.
Firstly, from my own perception, I believe that life and a machine are the same. We are the controller of our life machine. Whether a machine can work effective or not depends on the way it is controlled. I strongly believe that a neat and clean controller can control better than a messy one. We can look at Bill Gates and Michael Jackson. Bill Gates is successful in life, he had an excellent career, happy family and he is the idol of millions of people. In opposite, Michael Jackson, he is successful in music but is not in life. He did not know how to organize his life; he spent too much money for things which are not necessary. In addition, he did not care about his children’s education. Finally, he died with a mountain of debt. He was exactly a messy guy.
There is another reason that makes me thing a neat and clean people are more successful in life than messy people. Messy people are equal to lazy people. They are lazy in every thing, in career, in family issues, in relationship with friends, etc. A lazy person can’t become a successful person. I know a guy, a friend of mine. He is very lazy, he is absent in class, his room is very dirty, he never think about his future and he always say “let it be”. I strongly believe that he cannot become a successful man.
In conclusion, It’s very difficult define “a successful man”, it depends on individual thinking. But, I thing if we want to be successful in life or some side of life, we neat and clean in sides.
Comments
Your use of the term,
Your use of the term, "Messy," is very subjective. It's clear you have angst against someone who is messy because your argument is extremely weak. Coupled with your poor grammar, I'm going to suggest that you are actually a mess. You claim your roommate is lazy, a mess and won't go to class. I get it, you don't like your roommate. But what's your point? You claim he's lazy... Then you say he's messy. You then conclude that it's hard for messy people to succeed. What about lazy people? Are all lazy people messy? I get what you are trying to say, but you seem to ignore the reality of the question. You actually use the word, "definition," but you NEVER defined the words, "messy" or "clean." You never even defined the word "success." Start looking at things differently. Words of wisdom:
Try to as hard as you can to prove yourself wrong. If you can't, you have a point. If you can prove yourself wrong, admit it and let the reader know.
Lastly, after reading your essay I have these things to say:
* You come of as someone who takes pride in being neat and clean. Your essay, on the other hand, is a mess.
* Your grammar is terrible.
* You failed to define key concepts.
* What's a messy person? What's a clean person? What's a success?
* Your essay actually proved you wrong.... As stated early, you come across as someone who is neat and clean. Your disdain for messy people is pretty apparent. You try to prove that messy people are at a disadvantage. Honestly, after reading your essay, I thought you were a mess. Try to consider that clean people, like yourself, are flawed. Open your eyes.
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