Summarize the points made in the talk you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the government's plans to update the Biotechnology Resources Database.
In the reading passage, the explained what are the main benefits of a new biotechnology database. author support the decision for creating a new DB, its offers and limitations such as prepatetion of the DB will be the guideline of some experts and content will be specialised. etc.
By the way the speaker is neither happy about the decision nor its way. The speaker who is a women is completely contrast to the author. She believes that creating a new database according to the goverments idea brings a far less value to the already existed database. She is not only complaining about the 400 journal limited database but also elimination of the topics.
She is considering that biological sciences are related with many scientific area. Therefore, she believes that this kind of science content would not be limited for come topis and coverage must be broad. Because, goverment going to eliminate many journal, many scientist will not be able to bring together all the information as before. One of the other reason to oppose new database development is realization of the databse in an expensive way.
The speaker angry and worried about case and she emphasize that continiously this situation will bring ''far less value'' to the existed Biotechnology Resource Database.
Sentence: In the reading passage, the explained what are the main benefits of a new biotechnology database. author support the decision for creating a new DB, its offers and limitations such as prepatetion of the DB will be the guideline of some experts and content will be specialised. etc.
Description: The fragment author support the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace support with verb, past tense
Sentence: She is not only complaining about the 400 journal limited database but also elimination of the topics.
Description: not only ... but also ... is not used properly
Sentence: The speaker angry and worried about case and she emphasize that continiously this situation will bring ''far less value'' to the existed Biotechnology Resource Database.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to speaker and angry
Description: The fragment she emphasize that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace emphasize with verb, past tense
Sentence: In the reading passage, the explained what are the main benefits of a new biotechnology database. author support the decision for creating a new DB, its offers and limitations such as prepatetion of the DB will be the guideline of some experts and content will be specialised. etc.
Error: prepatetion Suggestion: preparation
Error: specialised Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: She believes that creating a new database according to the goverments idea brings a far less value to the already existed database.
Error: goverments Suggestion: governments
Sentence: Because, goverment going to eliminate many journal, many scientist will not be able to bring together all the information as before.
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Sentence: One of the other reason to oppose new database development is realization of the databse in an expensive way.
Error: databse Suggestion: database
Sentence: The speaker angry and worried about case and she emphasize that continiously this situation will bring ''far less value'' to the existed Biotechnology Resource Database.
Error: continiously Suggestion: continuously
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
The correct pattern is like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 211 350
No. of Characters: 1041 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.811 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.789 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.884 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4