TOEFL integrated writing: Endotherms

The article states that the are an evidences ensured that dinosaurs are endotherms animals,although the dinosaurs belonged to the modern reptiles that aren't endotherms animals, and provides three reasons of support. However the professor explains that many scientists don't think the arguments that mentioned in the article proved that the dinosaurs are endotherms animals and refutes each of the authors reasons.

First, the reading claims that what discovered in polar region about dinosaurs' fossils was one of the proofs that dinosaurs are on e of endotherms species. The professor refutes this point by saying that the weather in polar region was warmer than today and the endotherms animals couldn't lived in hot weather. In addition she states that at cold months many of dinosaurs migrated to warmer area or they were hibernated as modern reptiles these fossils were not a good proof.

Second, the article posits that the position of leg underneath the body which stimulated one of the physical activity such that running, that supported the theory of endotherms. However, the professor says that leg place underneath body not indicate that the animals are endotherms one, it just support the large weight of dinosaurs as they growth. According to the professor that the idea of running is not related to whether the animals are endotherms or not.

Third, the reading that one of the characteristics of endotherms animals are rapid growth of the body due to the Haversian canals that include in bone of endotherms. The professor opposes this point by explaining that the evidences of stop or slow growth during cold period are not characteristics of endotherms.

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Sentence: Second, the article posits that the position of leg underneath the body which stimulated one of the physical activity such that running, that supported the theory of endotherms.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?

use 'one of the physical activities such as running'

Sentence: However, the professor says that leg place underneath body not indicate that the animals are endotherms one, it just support the large weight of dinosaurs as they growth.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to they and growth

flaws:
Sentence Length SD: 3.523 7.5

Read this link about sentence length SD:
http://www.testbig.com/question/questions-about-essay-e-rater

You still need to improve your language by writing sentences smoothly. and Don't forget punctuation marks.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 273 250
No. of Characters: 1377 1200
No. of Different Words: 124 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.065 4.3
Average Word Length: 5.044 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.523 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.466 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.7 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

ok i do my best in the next time..
Do you propose to postpone my exam because my writing skill is so bad and i need more time to improve it. i took time more than required to finish my essay and i think two week will not enough to improve my english skills...please i need your help, i need your opinion because i am lost.
thnx
note i will take my exam in 31 august

Your writing skill is not 'so bad' just needs improving. We don't know your reading, listening and speaking, but from writing, depends on the scores you want to:

If you need totally 100 or over in TOEFL exam, you are not ready at least on writing, you need to postpone;

But if you don't need that much, for example, you only need 80, you can go ahead.

Let us know if you have more questions.