Writing Integerated - TPO 25
The professor discuses that the clay jars might have been used as batteries in ancient times. The information she presents is in direct contrast to facts outlined in reading.
The lecturer mentions that the having no evidence of any metal wires or conductor near these jars, is not a convincing reason. She explains that these jars have been found by local people who had not studied archaeology and they might found wires and did not recognize these are valuable artifacts. As a result, they found them uninteresting and throw them away. On the other hand, the reading clarifies that since no wire has been found in the site, the jars were not batteries.
The speaker states that likeliness of these jars to cylinders is not a reasonable reason that can prove jars were not used for producing energy. In her opinion, the clay jars may hadve been made for holding scrolls, but they were adapted for another purpose. It is possible that an individual has changed them by adding some liquid and an iron rod. In contrast, the reading describes that these jars are alike cylinders and so they are used for the same purpose.
The professor points out that these ancient batteries could be used as shocking devices in order to show invisible power that can deceiveintrigue people. In addition, they may be employed by physicians physicist to stimulate muscles and cure patients. However, the passage specifies that there was no use of a battery in ancient Iraq.
they might found wires
they might find wires
Sentence: The professor points out that these ancient batteries could be used as shocking devices in order to show invisible power that can deceiveintrigue people.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to can and deceiveintrigue
Sentence: In addition, they may be employed by physicians physicist to stimulate muscles and cure patients.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to physicians and physicist
Sentence: She explains that these jars have been found by local people who had not studied archaeology and they might found wires and did not recognize these are valuable artifacts.
Error: archaeology Suggestion: archeology
Sentence: In her opinion, the clay jars may hadve been made for holding scrolls, but they were adapted for another purpose.
Error: hadve Suggestion: have
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 249 250
No. of Characters: 1182 1200
No. of Different Words: 138 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.972 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.747 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.46 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.005 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4