The following appeared in a report presented for discussion at a meeting of the directors of a company that manufactures parts for heavy machinery:
"The falling revenues that the company is experiencing coincide with delays in manufacturing. These delays, in turn, are due in large part to poor planning in purchasing metals. Consider further that the manager of the department that handles purchasing of raw materials has an excellent background in general business, psychology, and sociology, but knows little about the properties of metals. The company should, therefore, move the purchasing manager to the sales department and bring in a scientist from the research division to be manager of the purchasing department."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion ou com also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument wold make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
In a discussion meeting of directors of a company that manufactures parts of heavy machinery, a report was presented which states that the company should move the current purchasing manager to sales department. The conclusion is based on the premise that the current purchasing manager has little knowledge of metals causing delay in manufacturing which in turn might be the reason of falling revenues. There are a few key factors which could call a conclusion to a question. The relies on several assumption on which there is no clear evidences. Hence the argument is unconvincing and several flaws.
Firstly, the argument states that the company is experiencing the falling in revenue is because of delay in manufacturing. Here the author fails to mention other factors affecting company’s revenue like increasing number of competitors or drop down of number of sales or there could be plenty of such reasons of falling of revenue. Hence there’s no clear evidence of this assumption.
Secondly, author of the argument mentions that poor planning of purchasing of metals is causing delay in manufacturing. This assumption is unsupported and evidence is unclear as co relation between purchasing of metal and manufacturing is not stated. Also delay in manufacturing can cause due to production inefficiency. The argument should provide more details about the delay in manufacturing.
Furthermore, moving purchase manager to the sales department may not be the best decision as he might not perform well in that department. And as purchase manager should have knowledge of general business management, project management psychology etc a scientist from research division would not be the good choice for purchasing manager.
Based on the facts I mentioned above I am not convinced that delay in manufacturing is causing the falling of revenue. The argument is weak and to make argument strong the author should provide clear statistical evidences of falling the revenue of company. Also author should provide link between poor planning of purchasing and delay in manufacturing. Without these evidences the argument is unsubstantiated
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 335 350
No. of Characters: 1772 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.278 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.29 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.999 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 548, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...n on which there is no clear evidences. Hence the argument is unconvincing and severa...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... of such reasons of falling of revenue. Hence there's no clear evidence of this ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... metal and manufacturing is not stated. Also delay in manufacturing can cause due to...
^^^^
Line 9, column 258, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nces of falling the revenue of company. Also author should provide link between poor...
^^^^
Line 9, column 409, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vidences the argument is unsubstantiated
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, may, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 335.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42985074627 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1430213495 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465671641791 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.5539707004 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.055555556 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218008583844 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682829447205 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085212173572 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115289157119 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570078431967 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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