some people say that the purpose of education for individual is to be useful to the society, while others argue that the purpose is to fulfill personal ambitions of an individual. Discuss. what is your opinion?
Some faction of the society argued that suggested education for personals is ultimately advantage to the world. While, others believe that their personal achievement of aims will be benefited to them. In my opinion is that achievement on educational ambitions would benefited to person as well as to the society. which is two side of a coin. In this essay I will discuss both fraction of the topic and give my opinion.
As one party argued, achievement of the ambition of people career goal by obtaining good education would be definitely advantage to any people, since which would expecting them great career path and the life. Most people in the society could be able to spend quality life when they be came a educated person. Every once in the society would prefer to have prestige, fame, money and the power due to quality educational background.Sstudy from Japanese student has suggested that 80% of people in Tokyo had been succeed as a result of good education.
On the other hand, purpose of individual education ultimate social benefited. If the society is having more educated people, there could be wide range of opportunity to find suitable job and unemployment rate in the society could decline. Hence, The government should not bother about the extra expenditure to training and development to unemployed personals and these money could be able to use any other development projects. Therefore, having educated society could benefited to the society as far as society and government is concern.
In my opinion, having ambition on education will benefited to both individual and the society. The measurement of the development of the society could measure both individual and society parameters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17204301075 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84254022716 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519713261649 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6114894163 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.071428571 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344833688459 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123925943621 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666892817135 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203831345097 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376271602986 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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