Some pepole say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become disciplined. Others argue that teenagers should not sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work.
Discuse both views and give your opinion.
I think it is a good idea to have a part-time job when they are at school. When they start earning money, they will get a lot of benefits such as independence, value of the money.
Firstly, teenagers should get a part-time job when they are at school in order to be independent from their parents. When they still are students, they usually ask their parents for money to do things with their friends or buy clothes. However, with the money they earn by the part-time job, they don’t need to ask their parents and they will be more confident to spend money.
Secondly, young people need to know the value of money. When they asked their parents for money to buy something, they will think they obivously have that thing for no reason. However, when they start working for their money, they will know how difficult it is and they will change the attitude about spending money.
In the other hand, having a part-time job affects to their time, so they can’t rest enough and enjoy their outdoor activities. Losing too much time can be a reason for young people to not complete their study.
In summary, when teenagers decide to have a part-time job, they need to know advantages and disavantages. Young people should ask their parents and teacher for opinions in order make their choice.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, i think, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1073.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 228.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70614035088 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30634621011 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 306.9 506.74238477 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5129324505 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.4166666667 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264142117043 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121065060044 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555146416228 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167675489612 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298247947636 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 50.2224549098 154% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 78.4519038076 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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