61 The following appeared in an article in the Grandview Beacon For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony Last year however private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at

The article appeared in the Grandview Beacon states that the funding of the symphony can be fully eliminated next year. To bolster the argument, the author claims that private contributions are increasing, there is more audience coming to the symphony, and there will be an increase in ticket price next year. However, before this argument stated, some questions need to be addressed first.

The author writes that the private contributions to the Grandview symphony increased by two hundred percent last year. Without knowing the original percentage from the year before, how can we ensure that two hundred percentage was a big increase? What if the private contribution was only one percent in the past? Even if it is true that personal funding was increased in a large percentage, it could not conclude that more personal funding would lead to more profits in the future. Therefore, the question of the growth of personal funding would need to be answered at first to support the argument.

Another question that needs to be answered is the attendance of the symphony. Since the article assumes from the doubled attendance last year, there will also be an increase in profit next year. How do we know that having more audience come to the symphony would provide more benefits? More audiences come to the symphony might because the ticket was free, or it might be an abnormal phenomenon that happened last year. Consequently, without the credence to answer this question about the increase in attendance, it’s untenable to boost the argument.

Besides, the announcement of increasing ticket price next year cannot fully support the argument as well. How do the commissioners promise that there will be an increase in profits by raising the price of tickets? If the ticket price increase, there might have a fewer audience to come since it’s too expensive to go to a symphony. Also, higher ticket price might be caused by higher costs that more money are needed in renting places, buying customs. As a result, the elimination of the funding might arouse negative effects on the symphony, so the question needs to be addressed first.

All in all, the commissioners' decisions on Grandview symphony is tenuous. They need to answer the question about the percentage of private funding in the past, possible increase in attendance in the future, and the possible effects of ticket price increasing.

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Average: 6.8 (4 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10858585859 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68526737997 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429292929293 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0476549849 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.15 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270298398349 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978143002073 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906969152104 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173055152297 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611025677799 0.0628817314937 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1954 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.653 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5