The following appeared in a popular health and fitness magazine.
"A ten-year study of a group of 552 men from Elysia showed that long-term consumption of caffeinated black tea was associated with a much lower risk of stroke. Of these men, those who drank more than three cups of black tea a day had a 70 percent lower risk of stroke than those who drank no tea. These results suggest that health-conscious people should consume at least three cups of black tea a day, beginning early in life." - GRE Argument 27
This magazine article concludes that in order to reduce the risk of stroke people should consume at least three cups of black tea per day, beginning at an early age. To justify this conclusion the artide cites a 10-year study involving 552 men from Elysia. Among these men those who consumed at least three cups of caffeinated black tea each day were at 70% lower risk of stroke than those who consumed no tea. Based on this evidence, I find the article's conclusion to be unjustified in several respects.
To begin with, the article's author provides no evidence that the study's two groups wer...
Sentence: To justify this conclusion the artide cites a 10-year study involving 552 men from Elysia.
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