Finding it hard to remember important facts and figures?Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course.Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time.You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your

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Finding it hard to remember important facts and figures?Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course.Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time.

You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory.
Write a letter to the organisers of the course.In the letter:
- give some background information about yourself
- explain your own problems and why you would like to do he course
- enquire about the methods used on the course
- enquire about course fees and dates

Dear Sir o Madam
My name is Mahsa Soudi Alamdari and I'm 32 years old. I have master's degree in IT and I've worked in a telecom company since I graduated.
Sometimes I have difficulties in remembering my previous project codes and algorithms. This problem affects my work inversely because it's very time-consuming to read the codes and understand what happens in the program. Actually, I forget everything very easy, for example my younger sister remembers much memories of our childhood than me or she remembers more people from his classmates, teachers, old family friends and …. I really wonder if there are many people like me have trouble remembering things or persons. Unfortunately, sometimes I forget where I put my stuff and it drives my husband crazy.
When I saw your advertisement, I wondered if you have good solutions for my problem.
I wrote this letter to you to inform me about the methods you teach in your classes for your students. I work all the week from 8:00 am till 4:30 pm, so I'd rather to take part in your evening or weekend classes if there are any. My other question was about the fees you charge for your course because the cost is important for me and I will compare the prices of different courses to choose the best in terms of quality and cost.
Best regards

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 37, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...am My name is Mahsa Soudi Alamdari and Im 32 years old. I have masters degree in ...
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Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...rs old. I have masters degree in IT and Ive worked in a telecom company since I gra...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...for example my younger sister remembers much memories of our childhood than me or sh...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
... the week from 8:00 am till 4:30 pm, so Id rather to take part in your evening or ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, really, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 5.60731707317 731% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1069.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 230.0 196.424390244 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64782608696 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67922413508 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 106.607317073 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639130434783 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8611929417 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1818181818 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193336955326 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608518522679 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685051828769 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107545712186 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820313608897 0.0819641961636 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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