How honey is made in a small scale commercial production

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How honey is made in a small-scale commercial production

The diagram illustrates the process of making honey produced in small-scale commerce.
It can be seen that there are 8 stages divided into 2 phases so as to make honey.
In the first stage of the opening phase, bees collect nectar in flowers and later, deposit them. Next in order to dehydrate honey which now being placed in small hexagon cells, fan wings are used. In final, wax, a special sticky liquid is used to cover cells in order to keep it clean and unpolluted.
Unlike the first phase without human intervention, the second phase sees serious interference from people. At the starting stage, wearing protections to avoid getting a bite from bees, they take out the honeycombs and bring it to a machine helping to crush those honeycombs. After that, the harvested honey is poured into a sump tank in order to be heated at the temperature from 45-50 Celsius degree. Having finished the heating process, a sieve tank does the job of removing dirt and other pollutants out of the honey. Honey then settles in another tank due to the cooling process and it can lasts from 2 to 4 days before ended up in jars. Finally, those jars fulfilled with honey is going to be packed and ready to be sold widely.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 62, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...here are 8 stages divided into 2 phases so as to make honey. In the first stage of the ...
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Line 4, column 594, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'last'
Suggestion: last
...k due to the cooling process and it can lasts from 2 to 4 days before ended up in jar...
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Line 4, column 650, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...4 days before ended up in jars. Finally, those jars fulfilled with honey is going...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, second, so, then, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62325581395 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41101671966 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651162790698 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.9915543243 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.3636363636 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135928915054 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562326213191 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663825957129 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108917379428 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073253825649 0.0819641961636 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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