You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and•Give your rea

Dear Mr.Walker,

I am writing this letter with regard to the post of Quality Assurance Manager. While going through the notice board yesterday, i have noticed that i am eligible for it.

I am pursuing Business Administration and by the end of this quarter will be ready with my results.The course was a combination of studying various business strategy, practical assignments and internship at the reputed firm.

I have had completed my graduation from California Business University.After that worked for 4 years as a Business Analyst in an M.N.C.After the completion of my post graduation from Loren Brusque University , i will also be able to take the roles and responsibilities of a Quality Manager.

I would request you to please consider my resume for this opportunity. I have attached a copy of my resume along with this letter.Looking forward for your positive response.

Yours Sincerely,
Jon Snow

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ce board yesterday, i have noticed that i am eligible for it. I am pursuing Bu...
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...s quarter will be ready with my results.The course was a combination of studying va...
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...ion from California Business University.After that worked for 4 years as a Business A...
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...years as a Business Analyst in an M.N.C.After the completion of my post graduation fr...
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...graduation from Loren Brusque University , i will also be able to take the roles a...
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...duation from Loren Brusque University , i will also be able to take the roles and...
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...opy of my resume along with this letter.Looking forward for your positive response. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, while, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 775.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 147.0 206.0 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27210884354 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48200454523 3.78020617076 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29399341565 2.54303337028 130% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 127.690721649 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65306122449 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.507991845 44.8134815571 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.714285714 76.5299724578 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 4.34317383033 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260153199269 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110011239596 0.0766984524023 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494241000377 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129713644423 0.12726935374 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525075460847 0.0580467560999 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 70.7449484536 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 7.45979381443 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.