The given first pie chart gives information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of greenhouse gas emissions caused by Australian household, which lead to environmental problems.

Essay topics:

The given first pie chart gives information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of greenhouse gas emissions caused by Australian household, which lead to environmental problems.

The given first pie chart provides information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of CO2 emission caused by Australian households that came from the consequence of energy consumption.

In general, Australians in each family tend to utilise the heating systems with the great deal proportion and these release greenhouse gas significantly.

As for the use of energy for heating, heating comprised of 42% but, this emitted just less half of CO2 emissions while using of water heating was nearly a third which was the similar amount of co2 emissions. In contrast, cooling was spent only 2% which was the lowest and only was released just 3% of green gas.

When it comes to other energy usages, the reminded total amount of energy consumptions consisted of 26% but the entire rate of CO2 emissions comprised of double the amount.

Overall, it can be seen that the heating system in Australian seems to be impractical regarding energy usages, and such power contributes to environmental problems and climate change potentials.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, second, similarly, so, still, third, while, as for, in contrast, more or less, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1044.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 198.0 315.596192385 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27272727273 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92420317135 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641414141414 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 506.74238477 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6095693894 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.25 7.06120827912 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480307341151 0.244688304435 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189370464083 0.084324248473 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.307700959961 0.0667982634062 461% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332302797317 0.151304729494 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.385508965118 0.056905535591 677% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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