Nowadays young people spend too much of their time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The trend that visiting many shopping centres among youngsters is common, these days. However, some people argue that it might cause adverse influences on the youth when they are devoted to too much of their time for it. I am in favour of this statement due to some reasons.
Some opponents who are against the idea of negative impacts on children visiting shopping malls often claim that there is a significant possibility that young children could develop their creativity effectively as looking at various commodities at shops. This is because by observing rich and colourful products displayed many adolescents would gain sensitive visual capabilities, and accordingly, this practice tends to improve their artistic senses and inspirations, which are fundamental factors for creativity. For example, many teenagers are able to enhance their eyes for fashion and creativity by dropping shopping malls regularly, via products in a direct way.
However, there are a couple of detrimental effects on the young if they spend too much time going shopping. The first notable point to consider is that 'time is gold', but many youngsters are inclined to have less meaningful and productive times than those who do not go to shops often for their free time; instead do regular outdoor activities. Another unfavourable effect is that such a children's hobby can cause excessive spending patterns when they are grown up in the future. The more staring at recently released items presented at shops, the more people wish to purchase them, even though they do not need at all.
In conclusion, I completely, agree with the idea that there are more drawbacks if young generations spend their time going shopping in shopping malls excessively because of unproductive time management for children and encouraging excessive expenditures potential.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, look, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32302405498 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81801608871 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601374570447 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.762348838 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.818181818 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291848908929 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106859758615 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678612600577 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176387586097 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506506719026 0.056905535591 89% => OK
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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