Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Other say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.Which view point do you agree with?

Many people are bombarded with various advertisements such as pop-up and tv commercials. In this situation, some people argue that advertising triggers the public to purchase unnecessary items, whereas others contend that ads are beneficial considerably as they could make our lifestyle better by introducing new products. I am persoanlly, in favour of the statement from the latter due to some reasons.

Some advocators who are affirmative in ads point out that as the advertisement gives rise to substantial merits in our lives by providing valid and useful information concerning new released commodities or services. Therefore, many consumers can easily get informed about new features of products as well as discounted sales. Besides, by accessing a variety of advertisements via media including billboards and banners, many businesses can be strongly inspired by other goods released in the market. So, the companies make more efforts to upgrade their merchandise This phenomenon consequently, also likely to let many consumers enjoy more plenty of choices while deciding to buy an item at shops.

However, it cannot be denied that ads have unfavourable influences on customers' lives. The main issue is that the more they are exposed to countless advertising, the more they like to spend money on buying products they watched on tv commercials or online. This is because many advertisements are considerably appealing and attractive enough. Thus, they can allure people to pay for items they displayed consistently although most of them are not essential to their lives. In the worst case, due to the overconsuming behaviours individually, many consumers tend to be suffering from the shortage of cost of living most of the time, which lead a harsh lifestyle to humans.

In conclusion, as mentioned above, I agree with the idea of the advertisements' negative impacts on human lives because of distinctive problems such as encouraging people to have excessive expenditures.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41290322581 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16053973973 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612903225806 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2728151245 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.076923077 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184540860492 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629929060418 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398487076365 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116170820636 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315145030563 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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