Some people believe that children s leisure activities must be educational otherwise they are a complete waste of time Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience

Many people feel that children's free time must include academic activity or else they will waste the time. I believe that children should allowed to spend their time in extracurricular activities. Some of the advantages of both sides are describe in following paragraphs.
On the one hand, there are few effective convenience to the student Life when they uses this time for instead of wasting time in sports, walking and gossiping with each other. Firstly, spend time with educational activities may help them to get a better and advance knowledge in their study, also this kind of habit may increase and update their knowledge. This will beneficial to the student while they searching for job. Although, there are some countries, where admission is not approve while students' academic status sound bad. Therefore, students who wants to get degree from higher Universities so they should engage themselves in study.
On the other hand, it can be argue, why kids requires free time to spend their own ways. One major point of utilize the time in extracurricular activity is that while children playing cricket, so they can learn about leadership as well as about teamwork. Moreover, they can build them physical and emotional development also they can rise their practical knowledge. There are many person famous by engage themselves in sports and other activities. Children can also build their relationship with colleagues and know about nature of other.
To sum up, it is consequential that children need to play besides the study in order to grow up their basic knowledge. In my opinion, utilize free time in study as well as in extra activity by children is necessary.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'spending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: spending
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...nvenience to the student Life when they uses this time for instead of wasting time i...
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Suggestion:
...activities may help them to get a better and advance knowledge in their study, al...
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Suggestion: approved
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'people', 'persons'?
Suggestion: people; persons
...eir practical knowledge. There are many person famous by engage themselves in sports a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, kind of, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07608695652 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69337941824 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561594202899 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6946041274 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46666666667 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186701745451 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665690495827 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575464997824 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125520096987 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664683503104 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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