Some people have benefited from modern communications technology, but some people have not benefited from it at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The development of new communication methods, especially telecommunications and its related sophisticated devices has improved our daily lives. But some people think that after all, they do not get any advantage from these innovations. I believe that technology was invented to serve people but we have to know how to use it.
On the one hand, the electrical devices and telecommunications have become increased, which help us collect new information better, become more well-informed and connect us with each other wherever we are. Because of these technologies, people in remote, rural areas have as equal an opportunity to communicate as those in urban areas; the old "communication gaps" have disappeared. Needless to say, students who live in the countryside have accessed global knowledge easily despite of having distance. Besides that, professional employees, who are disabled can work at home but they still ensure job performance. Telecommunications are solving the labor shortage crisis in the 21th century, which is serious problem of every country, nowadays.
However, media and communication devices such as television, phone and radio has rapidly spread, which leads to people ignore face-to-face relationships. With the development of social media websites on the Internet, people spend almost time making virtual relationships. A concrete example is a new disease of the 21th century. The new disease is the addiction to social networks. According to the report of sociologists , the numbers of people, who log in to websites such as Facebook , Twitter and Instagram over 13 hours per day to connect to others and create for themselves a dream virtual life instead going outside and make relationships has dramatically increased in the last two years.
Taking all of this into account, communication is always crucial activities to people or business either small or large. Therefore, in my opinion, presence of telecommunication has brought a significant advantage to people and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, after all, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53398058252 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40583841678 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656957928803 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7074335484 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223030177876 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657591537096 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067901019421 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132272865869 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644636646149 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.