Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is extremely important that governments spend money in the areas that needed the most. In mi opinion, authorities should invest money in support of sports. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the support from government is important for the development of athletes and sports in general because they will represent our nation in future events. Furthermore, with the help of sport institutions, athletes and coaches can have better instruments and training, and athletes can make personal improvements and develop better skills. My brother is a compelling example of this. About twenty-five years ago, he began playing tennis in our hometown and the equipment that he used was not as sophisticated as it is today. As a result, his performance was not that high, despite the fact he was the best player on his team. For this reason, the Academy decided to give his coach a salary increase, in order to improve my brother’s performance. The results were astonishing because he was able to accomplish a lot of tasks in a short period of time. With the money received, he was able to acquire a new set of rackets, new clothes and shoes. In addition, he began to compete in our town, and later with player from other municipalities. Consequently, he won the Nationals and this team classified for the Olympics. It was a tremendous advance in his career, thanks to the government’s support. In my opinion, my brother would not have accomplished his goal without the help of his coach and the government.
Secondly, the support from the government for new talents is important because they can represent their nation in future tournaments. It is a fact that a lot of hidden talents, when discovered, are better than other athletes because of the support they receive. I remember about twenty years ago when I had the opportunity to visit South Africa during the Olympics. It was there the first time I heard about Maria Lourdes Mutola, the first South African female to have won the Olympic tittle over 800 meters. Moreover, after the historical race I decided to know more about her personal life and discovered that she was in fact a volleyball player, not a runner. When her couch saw her potential, he decided to work on her future as soon as possible. With the help of the Mozambique government, both of them traveled to United Stated to have a better and more sophisticated training. After two years of continuous practice, she conquered her dream, to become an Olympic medalist. She was nor only an incredible athlete, but also a great human being. Furthermore, during her last tournament in Mozambique, her country of origin, she decided to withdraw from the competition in order to give way to young competitors. Her personal example has been of great inspiration and motivation for generations of athletes, who, like her, want to excel. In my opinion, this would not have happened without the support of the government.
To conclude, I am of the opinion that athletics should receive total support from governments and political entities in general. This is because their help is important for the development of athletes and because the new talents discovered might represent future medals for their country at the Olympics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, i feel, in addition, in fact, in general, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2754.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96216216216 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88793476281 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464864864865 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 858.6 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6334637788 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9655172414 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1379310345 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.62068965517 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165066479495 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492466801735 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536364150335 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11964370374 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313784208182 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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