Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive and complex world, with the development of new technological devices, most people appear to spend too much time watching TV shows and movies, especially young people. Moreover, a variety of channels and hundreds of various programs are accessible to different age groups. Most people believe Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. However, others disagree with this idea. From my vantage point, TV shows and movies have exceptional influences on youth's lives. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, young people can decrease their stress and anxiety by watching their favorite movies and TV shows after their long time classes they need to b relax. Nowadays, TV has joyful programs for various ages. Thus, TV can be an excellent choice for everyone after stressful days and facing different problems. Youth can relax and enjoy their favorite movies. For example, two years ago, I used to go to the university and had many projects. Those days were stressful, and all the time, I got nervous and depressed. One day, a friend of mine recommended a TV series called "Friends." After I began to watch this series, I felt calm and joyful. It was hilarious. This series not only reduces my stress level and makes me joyful after doing long time projects but also improves my English.
Second, TV programs can have an extraordinary impact on young individuals' data and knowledge. It can encourage them to search in various fields and learn more and more. It not only affects youth's general information but also helps them be more active in the university and society. The teachers can choose suitable programs from TV, encourage their students to watch this program, and ask them to explain their idea about that to the classroom. Teachers with this method can kill two birds with one stone. Students can learn and improve their information about the related area, and also, they can spend their free time on practical tasks. From my own experience, when I was a middle school student, one of our teachers recommended a short scientific program to us once a week. It was exciting and meaningful. We learned a lot of new things about different sciences, and in the next class, we discussed them.
In conclusion, from where I stand, movies and TV shows have more beneficial effects on youth because of two main reasons. First, young people can decrease their stress and anxiety with this method. Second, it can have a great impact on their data and information in different fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98861047836 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63237052638 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521640091116 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9157520453 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1111111111 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2592592593 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162805923002 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485062045931 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908738045911 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130713139216 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103268898435 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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