if the adults should live independent from their parent or not

Essay topics:

if the adults should live independent from their parent or not

All of us dream to reach a level when we become dependent on our selves depends just on our decision to build our lives as we want. The age when we became responsible without any trending from relative or parents differs from one to one, this depends on how we grow,how much we learned from life,So this makes me in minds about to live alone or to stay within the family members,I have many factors which define the proper case.
To begin with, if you have a good personality also enough courage, you determine in this case that you can live independently. I agree with that all of us should try to live alone this will enhance your skills in life, makes you harder enough to face any problem in the life, every wrong decision you will correct to your self, really correct you, trigger you to be bolder,you will know who to get out from any dilemma easily like you did not hurt,like this just paraphrase your principle,such those principle is to depend on your budget, to work harder, this create to you thankful feeling to your parents when knowing how this was hard t them to raise you without any complaint about your big budget. My experience is a compelling example of this, when I was in university ,i decided to take a dorm with roommate also to work alone to get money for my studying,in the first it was hard and tough mission on me how to tiding my time ,how to cook,buy vegetables,how the salary will be adequate for month,I tried much without any help, in the first semester I remember that I was weak and disrupted and I got low marks, that I complained that there's no time to study,but I in the last term I got the highest mark between all the student in my major as well as I was getting the best employee every month in my company, just realize how this way drafted me and gave me enough leading skills in my life.
On the other hand, I see that many adults will destroy if they will live alone because that the mentally and intellectually skills are trapped in just small liberty, which this happened from the bad raising, or from the over-dependent on the parent in everything,I think that there are adult people who can lead companies while others who cannot decide anything without getting consensus, this delay the brain completing process, SO this kind of people need to stay enough time with their families to get enough realization and understanding, or this will fall the person in bad consequences.
In conclusion, I feel that the understanding level you have determined if you able to live alone or to stay within your family, if you were strong enough you can feel in some independence, but if you did not have enough skills you need more time just, this help you to avoid many problems in future if you want to be independent.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, well, while, i feel, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49601593625 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51504338868 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498007968127 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 20.1344086022 353% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 213.268346819 48.9658058833 436% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 322.428571429 100.406767564 321% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.7142857143 20.6045352989 348% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.8571428571 5.45110844103 346% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12401085701 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669360879093 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582811061613 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897562740866 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587149486937 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.6 11.7677419355 303% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 16.33 58.1214874552 28% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.6 10.1575268817 282% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.0 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.0537634409 302% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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