TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Never before has the problem of education been such salient as today. With all distractions bothering children – from cell phone, online games to social networking Web site, parents and teachers are struggling to let them focus on study. Thus, some argue that educating children is more difficult today than it was in the past. Personally speaking, however, I fundamentally disagree with this view because those seemingly harmful tools indeed improve their study efficiency and stimulates their interests.
To begin with, today’s state-of-the-art technology provides children with effective ways to learn. There are mobile applications that teach people how to solve math problems, online games that help them to memorize vocabularies such as word puzzle, and Web sites that offering a range of online courses. Basically, we can learn what we want whenever and wherever. For example, I like to use an application named Shanbay to remember English vocabularies. Its greatness lies in all aspects – be it the clear word definition, the reminder of time to revise, or the list of anonyms and synonyms. Besides, it is so well-designed that encourages me to keep memorizing words every day, making me able to get familiar with many abstruse words and lay a solid foundation for further study. Therefore, taking advantages of those tools enables teachers to teach children in high efficiency.
Moreover, new teaching methods that involves application of multimedia and networking can enhance children’s interests. In the past, the main form of teaching is delivering lectures. Hardly can we deny that it is dull to passively listen to a long lecture. I often see in the school that students fall asleep when taking literature courses, and of course, I am not an exception. Somewhat the teacher’s speech seems more magical than sleeping pills, since all we can do are listening, reading, and taking notes. By contrast, thanks to the development of multimedia and the Internet, nowadays teachers can tutor children in brand new ways, ways that are interactive and attracting. For instance, when talking about evolution, it is favorable for teachers to use documentary videos and pictures to vividly demonstrate the transformation of some species. In this way, children can not only find motivation to study but also learn the knowledge by heart.
In the final analysis, although the excess exposure to those mediates might distract youngsters’ attention, it can be solved by restricting the usage of them. So, I believe that it is easy to educate children now than before due to the effective and inspiring teaching methods that they bring about.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
Never before has the problem of education bee...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
...hone, online games to social networking Web site, parents and teachers are struggling to...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, of course, such as, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31615925059 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98815457834 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611241217799 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3620437954 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.095238095 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19602134846 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547403364203 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688895014469 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128338959905 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950939647616 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.