Career selection, essential to people's lives, has been valued and even triggers heated discussions over how to select a satisfying job. With the same rate of salary, a job with more vacation time but less fun, in some people's views, is a perfect choice. Contrary to these people's views is my perspective that people should choose an interesting and challenging job with less vacation due to the contribution to people's career development and personal relationship.
What should be prioritized is that embarking on an intriguing and challenging occupation, instead of a job with more vacation but less interest, is beneficial to people's career development by helping them acquire a wide range of professional knowledge and increase efficiency. To begin with, never can we ignore that taking up challenging jobs is conducive to our knowledge base. To be specific, when confronting a challenging and difficult situation, people will be motivated and stimulated to search for a great quantity of relevant knowledge and review massive materials, which aids people in obtaining a great deal of proficiency; on the contrary, hardly can people acquire such expertise if they only embark on straightforward and easy jobs. Moreover, it is taking up an interesting job that helps people boost efficiency in the work field. Specifically, when engaging in intriguing vocations, people will concentrate and focus on their tasks and projects, enabling them to reduce possible errors and time spent on distractors; in contrast, how can people be focused if they have more vacation time, drifting their attention to social media, such as Twitter and Facebook.
What should be equally worth discussing is that taking up funny and challenging careers with less vacation, compared with jobs having more free time, places employees as beneficiaries by helping them develop a good relationship with their colleagues and supervisors. Initially, having a longer working time assists people in maintaining strong bonds with their coworkers. In detail, with a shorter vacation, people can devote their time to working with their colleagues, such as accomplishing projects, discussing economic research and solving complex problems, helping them develop an intimate connection with their colleagues; on the other hand, it is impossible for people to have such strong and robust bonds with their teammates if they spend most of their time on vacation. In addition, taking up challenging jobs and having less vacation time not only benefit individuals' connection with their coworkers but also assist them in having a robust relationship with their boss. In detail, when confronting challenging and difficult problems, employees will consult and communicate with their bosses, rendering assistance in developing strong relationships between workers and supervisors; however, how can such bonds be built in a job with more vacation?
To conclude, an interesting and challenging job with less vacation is preferable, which enables people to reap and harvest the maximum benefits in their career development and personal relationships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 982, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... a robust relationship with their boss. In detail, when confronting challenging an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51046025105 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04409624431 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47489539749 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.2145685484 48.9658058833 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 188.142857143 100.406767564 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1428571429 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420694397234 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.207413041578 0.076458572812 271% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134089294262 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323156687294 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667498469861 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 11.7677419355 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.27 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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