Reading passage New Zealand located in the southwestern Pacific Ocean is an island country that geographically comprises two main landmasses North Island Te Ika a M ui and South Island Te Waipounamu and several smaller islands There is evidence that the f

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Reading passage:
New Zealand, located in the southwestern Pacific Ocean, is an island country that geographically comprises two main landmasses, North Island (Te Ika-a-Māui) and South Island (Te Waipounamu), and several smaller islands. There is evidence that the first inhabitants of New Zealand moved there around 1300 C.E.
One piece of evidence is the indigenous Polynesion people of New Zealand, the Māori, who originated from settlers arriving in waves of canoe voyages from eastern Polynesia. Over several centuries of isolation on the islands, the Polynesian settlers developed their own culture that would become known as the Māori. They formed their own language, rich mythology, and distinctive crafts and performing arts. Historically the Māori contains 24-27 generations. If each generation averaged approximately 25 years apart then by calculating the number of years multiplied by the number of generation the Māori moved to New Zealand around 1300 C.E.
Also, a pollen study shows that trees were replaced by the grass around this time period which would not be caused by forest fires. Therefore it is concluded that it was a result of primitive agriculture and must be of human origin.
Finally, artifact have been dated using radiocarbon dating and show evidence of human occupation from around 1288 C.E. to 1300 C.E. Radiocarbon dating determines the age of an object by using the properties of radiocarbon, a radioactive isotope of carbon, to determine how old an object is depending on how much radiocarbon is still present. By using this process, scientists are able to give an estimate of when something originally existed.
Lecture (Professor):
Even though everything you just read in the reading passage about the first group of people who moved to New Zealand is true, the evidence has been re-examined and different conclusions have been reached.

First, although the Māori originated with settlers from eastern Polynesia, today most of New Zealand's population is of European decent and the Māori are now the largest minority. New Zealand's culture is mainly derived from Māori and early British Settlers, but the evidence only proves that Māori have existed for this time period. We cannot conclude that there were not people living in New Zealand before the Māori arrived.

Also, the evidence that trees were replaced by grass during the 1300 C.E. time period does not prove that humans set the fire for primitive agriculture. Reduced rainfall at the time could have resulted in the natural fire that could have cleared the area. Forests affected by seasonal drought and other conditions have natural fires as a recurrent phenomenon.

And third of all, there is evidence of items such as rat bones that have proven to be older than the artifacts referred to in the reading. Because rats are a non-native species to New Zealand, they must have been brought to New Zealand by humans. This means there were likely other settlers before the Māori.

The reading and the lecture are about the first group of inhabitants of New Zealand. Whereas the author of the reading states that there is evidence that indigenous people, the Maori, were the first settlers, the lecturer explains that although this can be true, the evidence was re-examined. The lecturer casts doubt on the main points made in the reading by providing three reasons.

First of all, according to the passage, the Maori, an indigenous Polynesian people of New Zealand is the evidence that they were the very first people who inhabitant the country. In addition, the passage mentions that the Polynesian settlers developed their own culture and language. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes this point by mention that most New Zealand people's origin is from Europe and the Maori are the minority. Furthermore, the lecturer explains that it was impossible to conclude that there were no people living in New Zealand before the Maori.

Secondly, the reading mentions that because off primitive agriculture of human origin, trees were replaced by grass, according studies in pollen. Nevertheless, the lecturer disputes this point by mention that if trees were replaced by grass, this does not prove that humans set the fire for primitive agriculture. Moreover, the lecturer mentions that reduce rainfall may cause fires and this fires can clear the area.

Finally, the article states that human occupation was proved using the radiocarbon dating method. In addition, the passage mentions that this method can estimate how old something is and when originally exists. On the other hand, the lecturer mentions that there is evidence of items older, for example, rat bones, which means that they were bring to the island quite before the Maori. Moreover, this proves that other settlers were there before.

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Average: 1.2 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a inhabitant'.
Suggestion: who is a inhabitant
...ce that they were the very first people who inhabitant the country. In addition, the passage m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
..., rat bones, which means that they were bring to the island quite before the Maori. M...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, in addition, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31615120275 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5867045624 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498281786942 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.23620309051 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7210520693 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9285714286 7.06452816374 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.090328534516 0.272083759551 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354994005149 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361868642827 0.0662205650399 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.059005484682 0.162205337803 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346597927441 0.0443174109184 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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