Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they challenge the specific arguments presented in the reading passage In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms How

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Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific arguments presented in the reading passage.
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients’ health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.

The author of the article suggests that electronic medical record systems have a lot of benefits that outweigh paper keep. However, the lecturer refutes the prescriptions and list evidence to refute it.
The writer first suggests that the electronic medical record can reduce costs since doctors can easily take the record through the electronic method and it also saves money to keep from paper records. But the speaker argued that the cost of storage can not be the benefit of the electronic medical records since money is also needed to pay for electronic, also doctors will keep the original paper record as the backup so there not necessary to copy the paper record.
The author still indicates that electronic records might prevent errors because the handwriting one might have some error during the transcription. The speaker still argued that doctors still take the note in paper and the duty of the electronic record is the staff behind the doctor. If the doctor writes the wrong prescription during the handwriting, the transcription through the electronic record will still have errors.
Finally, the author mentions the research to added in the records is easier through the electronic way than the paper. Nonetheless, the lecturer against the author and says there is no benefit through the electronic method to add research since all information is private in the United States that all records need to be agreed upon by patients. Doctor need a serious and complex procedure to get the record, and they still cannot get the record since the patient block them to use.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 354, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'needs'.
Suggestion: needs
...d to be agreed upon by patients. Doctor need a serious and complex procedure to get ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 262.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04961832061 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49947550002 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488549618321 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.0 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.5041119915 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.3 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142356076252 0.272083759551 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065947232405 0.0996497079465 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344101397798 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094817823476 0.162205337803 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036927303033 0.0443174109184 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.3589403974 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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