TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

Both the reading and the lecture discuss about the glass windows in high building. The reading says that by making some changes in the glasses we prevent birds getting injury. But, the lecture refutes this that it has negative impact and injuries on birds.

Firstly, the passage states that using one way glass allow residents to see from inside the room, at the same time for birds it looks like solid stuff, so the won't strike on them which is causes for injury. The lecture counter this point by saying that the one way glasses will act like a mirror, imagine that if the tree image on the glass they think that is real tree and they try to go through it which causes harm to them. Moreover, it cannot sense the difference between the real and reflection images that makes hard for birds.

Secondly, the passage suggests that colorful designs such as stripe that makes the birds to feel like some obstruction is there on the way to fly, so the take other route for their flight. The professor opposes this statement by explaining that making stripes on the window looks like a hole, so, they want to get into that for food and so on. Further, to prevent this we have to make very closer stripes that makes the resident cannot see anything from their window.

Thirdly, the reading claims that magnetic field could be useful for avoid birds striking on window glasses because the sense the magnetic fields by nature. Again, The speaker challenges this idea by stating that it uses the signal detecting sense while it travels for long distance like migration from cold to warmer climate. For short distance it won't use it and uses the eye sight and brightness of the sunlight.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in high building. The reading says that by making some changes in the glasses we...
^^
Line 9, column 374, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...rt distance it wont use it and uses the eye sight and brightness of the sunlight. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 416, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e sight and brightness of the sunlight.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69127516779 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.0857371685 2.5805825403 81% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543624161074 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8373256174 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357698743148 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124849418654 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747989474762 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204859332735 0.162205337803 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406704954239 0.0443174109184 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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