TPO No.39
Having a secure and successful job is ranked among the essentials people's needs to have a satisfying life. So, humans in the entire history have seeking to find such a job. In my opinion, people currently have a better chance to choose those jobs that lead to success, compared to the past. In the following essay, I explain my reasons for this point of view.
First of all, by the advent of new technology, people can find useful information about the advantageous and disadvantageous of any job that they want to pursue. In fact, they can evaluate their situations and the requirements of the selected jobs and therefore, make a better decision. For example, through the internet, individuals can find basic information about marketing. So, they can assess their abilities on marketing or develop them to suit the job. By doing so, they would be more likely to accomplish what they expect from their career. To be more specific, my brother was trying to speak with customers more effectively and that was based on some great videos that he found on Youtube. So, after a while of practicing, now he can convince most of the potential customers to buy their goods.
Secondly, nowadays there are succeeded persons in every society that can be considered as models and followed by others. Actually, we can find in any job or discipline a determined individual who got prosperous and now is referred to as an important model. These models could be used by people to get ideas from them and put lights on their ways of success. As an example, most people are familiar with Ronaldo, who is one of the best football players ever. Undoubtedly, he is a hard-working person with a determined personality and never gives up on his purposes. He has inspired numerous young football players to be like him. In fact, these young ones pursue his ways of success, and now some of them such as Mbape are famous and succeeded footballer.
To conclude, I strongly believe that nowadays people can be surer about the future and success in their careers. That is because they can use various technologies to get information in every major and because they are likely to find a great model to follow them and be successful.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
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| 2018-10-26 | Mostafa1367 | 3 | view |
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in fact, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79057591623 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71212274233 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520942408377 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7767267075 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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