Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries has positive effects, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The growing globalization in terms of international commercial activities and cultural exchange, which interconnect the different parts of world in a globalized village, is often viewed as a promising development due to its effectiveness in not only increasing availability of larger livelihood opportunities, and higher living standards for local citizens in underdeveloped countries, through tourism according to some advocates. In contrast, others disagree that we should not overlook the dangers from the loss of national specialties, the major detrimental impact of interconnected globe. This essay will discuss both aforementioned views and conclude the author’s point of view.
Borderless commerce and cultural relationships foster the necessity of an international language, connecting between nations which have different types of verbal languages, and dialects, threatening the world cultural diversity. The benefits of determining the most chosen spoken languages can be clearly seen in better collaborations among countries, contributing the efficient of transnational commercial trade, and cultural associations. As a result, the dominance of affluent countries ‘cultures is inevitable, speeding up the disappearance of others’ minor cultural identity. For example, Vietnamese young generations currently favor American and Korean songs, films and TV shows rather than their traditional folksongs, dances and dramas due to the uncontrollable diffusion and integration of the foreign customs, leading to the distortion of the Vietnamese-origin practices. Despite of that fact, if the local authorities could take action with some realistic measures such as organizing local cultural exploring tour for both foreigners and inhabitants, or in any form of advertisement of inferior culture to the world, mostly through international tourism, then national identities still be well-preserved because of its uniqueness.
Regarding to the positive attributes of globalization, the advancement of worldwide tourism industry offer golden benefits for low-skilled labor and the government in less-developed countries to access to stable income employment. This is due to the needs of entertainment and exploring new destinations or learning a different culture for some considerable period of time at length, particularly when people urge to take a rest by participating social activities in local areas or sightseeing historical and natural attractions. Tourism increases the rate of employment with stable income for low-educated and high-skilled workers, innovate roads, highways and other public facilities such as hotel and accommodations to meet global standards and provoke a greater consumption, or greater amount of foreign exchange earnings for that country, therefore, there is no doubt to say that tourism is a significant economic growth contributor, helping the poor to possess a better living conditions. For example, by optimizing the stunning, and attracting landscape, and UNESCO Heritage sites, Bali islands in Indonesia had become one of the must-visit tourist attractions in Asia, with thousands of foreigners visiting Bali annually, generating a large number of jobs for the locals although critics underlines the importance of preserving natural resources from being environmentally degraded because of the unconscious of few tourists of pollution.
In conclusion, although there is no doubt that globalization is critically destroying the cultural diversity and somehow speeding up the environmental degradation, in my opinion, interconnected world’s advantages still outweigh its negative impacts because the increasing socioeconomic development of less developed nations by the rapid growth of tourism industry had promote a better living quality for local citizens, and fulfillment in terms of earning more money than ever before.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...different culture for some considerable period of time at length, particularly when people urg...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: taking
...t length, particularly when people urge to take a rest by participating social activiti...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ners visiting Bali annually, generating a large number of jobs for the locals although critics un...
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Line 4, column 369, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'promoted'.
Suggestion: promoted
...he rapid growth of tourism industry had promote a better living quality for local citiz...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'promoted'.
Suggestion: promoted
...he rapid growth of tourism industry had promote a better living quality for local citiz...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of earning more money than ever before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 41.998997996 188% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3329.0 1615.20841683 206% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 549.0 315.596192385 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.06375227687 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4641111929 2.80592935109 123% => OK
Unique words: 325.0 176.041082164 185% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591985428051 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 1028.7 506.74238477 203% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.2975951904 207% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 127.021220796 49.4020404114 257% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 256.076923077 106.682146367 240% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.2307692308 20.7667163134 203% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17675391114 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666060271784 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485751999093 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102915203311 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446483078382 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.2 13.0946893788 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.47 50.2224549098 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 11.3001002004 205% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 18.76 12.4159519038 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.76 8.58950901804 137% => OK
difficult_words: 210.0 78.4519038076 268% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.1190380762 186% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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