Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes then spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with this statement
We are living in the age of information technology where we can find information with just one click. Many social networking applications, games are invented for human for many different purposes like: entertainment, relaxing, etc.However, with the development of techonogy, many people belive that childern are extremely replied on computers and video games, and they should take part in more leisure activities and trandition games. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of playing more outdoor activities than playing computer games.
Outdoor activities bring a lot of benefits to children. When children play more physical activities, it makes them stronger and has a healthy body. Furthermore, playing sports and traditional games can help children learn a lot of skills like teamwork, leadership and communication. A good example of that is playing football. Football is a team sport, so when children play this sport, they need to have a good interaction with other members and find out a strategy together to beat the opponent. As a result, they can get more experience and have more skills to face with the social life. Moreover, playing sports has a strong impact on children’s sleeping and it can reduce stress perfectly. Children may have a lot of stress because their parents and teachers expect on them a lot. Playing sport outside, children can benefit from fresh air which is said to promote a good night’s sleep and reduce stress.
Although computers and electronic entertainment are good for developing children’s brain, it also has a strong negative influence on children in many aspects. Playing computer and other media comes a lack of exercise, and it can lead to obesity. When children are prolonged exposure to blue light, it can harm their eyes sight which is linked to myopia and other eye diseases. Children can be addicted to computer games when they play too much. This can affect their education, they may drop out of school or lose interest in continuing in their study.
To sum up, it is good if children join in more outdoor activities than playing computer games and other electronic entertainment. There is a need for parents to encourage children to spend more time on more outdoor activities.
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| 2019-11-13 | Muhammad Zubair | 66 | view |
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11444141689 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82917251549 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517711171662 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8316659876 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7894736842 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255950675172 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872870458124 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487781337058 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159036976848 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140480118828 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.