The worst trip I ever had

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The worst trip I ever had.

I would like to share the worst trip I ever had. It happened when I’m in 4th grade, I was on a trip to my hometown with my family and my relative by coach. I was woken up at 5 am, it was drowsy for me but I was really excited because of the sleepiness so I slept until my mom woke me up for breakfast. Because the road is very long, sometimes I was very tired and there are times when I got carsick and vomited, so it was one of the worst things of that trip. Not yet, when we got there, it was very hot and we still had to wait for my uncle to come to take everyone to his house. I remember that once my parents went to a Phong Nha cave with my uncle’s family and left me at home with their children. It was early in the morning, I woke up in a sleepless state and went to look for my parents but they were not there. I was very scared here and someone informed me that my parents went to work! I don't think it's a good lie for a kid who came hometown for the first time, didn't know anyone, and couldn't find where were the parents. Those are the most impressive memories for me now and I hope that if I have a trip back home again I wish I can enjoy the trip.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...rmed me that my parents went to work! I dont think its a good lie for a kid who came...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...t my parents went to work! I dont think its a good lie for a kid who came hometown ...
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Suggestion: didn't
...d who came hometown for the first time, didnt know anyone, and couldnt find where wer...
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Suggestion: couldn't
... the first time, didnt know anyone, and couldnt find where were the parents. Those are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 6.10837438424 33% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 20.9802955665 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 31.9359605911 85% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.75862068966 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 920.0 1207.87684729 76% => OK
No of words: 244.0 242.827586207 100% => OK
Chars per words: 3.77049180328 5.00649968141 75% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.00935062198 2.71678728327 74% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 139.433497537 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545081967213 0.580463131201 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 304.2 379.143842365 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.57093596059 76% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.6157635468 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.65517241379 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6551724138 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.5024630542 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.1366287173 50.4703680194 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.222222222 104.977214359 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1111111111 20.9669160288 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 7.25397266985 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.12807881773 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 6.9802955665 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168038212545 0.242375264174 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112189185273 0.0925447433944 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19133527805 0.071462118173 268% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168038212545 0.151781067708 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0609392437508 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 12.6369458128 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.91 53.1260098522 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.9458128079 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 4.88 11.5310837438 42% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.33 8.32886699507 76% => OK
difficult_words: 21.0 55.0591133005 38% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.94827586207 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.3980295567 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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