Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, many people opine that only by raising the price of sugar-contained products will well-being of residents be upgraded. While the health of society, in general, may improve if sugary food become exorbitant, I believe that it brings more downsides than advantages.
Turning into detail, it is deemed that many health issues stem from the high grade of saccharide from the citizens’ eating habits. To be more specific, it is metabolism disorders, namely obesity and cardiovascular diseases, that turn into more prevalent due to the overuse of sweeting additives compared to the past. In fact, around 1900s where sugar is a precious goods which only grows in certain areas over the world, hence, most people cannot approach these highly expensive products, leading to lower sugar-related disorders than ever. Indeed, the officials should take an action into food and drink industry, in which they can impose a new tax with a reason that protects residents’ health. As a consequence, people are likely to reduce the proportion of high calory products in their nutrition on a regular basis.
From my perspective, I inclined to those who oppose to this proposal. Firstly, sugar is a necessary resource for the activities of the body, therefore, requiring those in daily meals plays a pivotal role in assuring the energy for working. According to Ministry of health, only by taking it more than 10 grams per day in the long run is citizens’ health prone to be metabolism-related diseases. Therefore, elevation the cost for saccharide food is likely to lessen the required factors for daily life. However, if individuals are aware of detriments brought by their eating habits, it is obvious that there will be an improvement in eradicating numerous health risks.
In conclusion, although increasing the price of sugary products is likely to drop the health problems, I disagree that this proposal leads to the lack of requisite energy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 365, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'good'?
Suggestion: good
... around 1900s where sugar is a precious goods which only grows in certain areas over ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20382165605 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91930360929 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611464968153 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9076891012 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.692307692 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290766613498 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875568725032 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617761975813 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173105091441 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767251335696 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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