1.The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
In this arguments, Monarch book directors recommended for the opening of the café. They are planning to open the café by closing down the children’s book sections. The monarch books directors also states that they are having the business from 20 years ago in this locations. Directors also stated that by opening the café they will attract more customers. However, In my perspectives the arguments is valid but due to lack of evidences, it fails to provides the convincing conclusion. The above recommendations from the directors of the Monarch books have much fallacy, which leads this arguments towards irevelent.
Firstly, directors recommends that they were having business in the same locations from many years. Although, he fails to provides the evidence, what type of business will be success in the area. If they were success from twenty years, what is the reasons behinds their success?. They also stated they will open the café by closing down the children’s sections on the basis of declining in the populations of children’s under ten years. However, they fails to provides the actual population of the area. If the populations of area is small,the percent declining of the childrens unders ten years also will be small. Morevers, by opening the café it will not attract the more peoples , because childrens may came with the parents in the that area, if childrens will not find anything of their interests they will move to another place. So,Merely on the basis of declining of populations of children sunders ten years they it mighnot be relevant to closing down the childrens book sections.
Secondly, the authors also seems to assume that the café will attract more customers.Although, Where is the evidence? Without the supportive evidenc,it will not be relevants to say that it will attract more peoples. Childrens book sections may be more attractive to the café. Also,peoples may not like fast food,due to health consensus.Instead of soft drinks and fast food they may go to the club or fitness centers.If major chunks of customers do not find the idea agreeable it will be bad decisions to open the cafeteria.
Other assumptions made by authors is that, opening the café it will helps Monarch to compete with the regal books which has café. In order to make these assumptions, the authors must have to provide the supportive evidence before recommending the arguments. The questions will be answered by for examples conducting the poll in the area whether the opening of the café at regal book give it an edge. If the opinion of poll results show that they were not appealed by the opening of café the recommendations will be flawed.
To conclude, Questions givens have to be answered in order to make the arguments valid and reasonable. If the authors will provides the evidence against the questions asked the arguments will be convincing, otherwise the arguments seems to be irrevelents.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257299270073 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.162408759124 0.15541462614 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0547445255474 0.0836205057962 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0419708029197 0.0520304965353 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.043795620438 0.0272364105082 161% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120437956204 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0346715328467 0.0416121511921 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.90700937457 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.036496350365 0.026700313972 137% => OK
Particles: 0.00547445255474 0.001811407834 302% => OK
Determiners: 0.116788321168 0.113004496875 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0383211678832 0.0255425247493 150% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00912408759124 0.0127820249294 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2956.0 2731.13054187 108% => OK
No of words: 484.0 446.07635468 109% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10743801653 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338842975207 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293388429752 0.287650121315 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.206611570248 0.208842608468 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154958677686 0.135150697306 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90700937457 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 207.018472906 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413223140496 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.2668264269 52.1807786196 89% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 20.1666666667 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6223534695 57.7814097925 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.166666667 141.986410481 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.458333333333 0.724660767414 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 3.58251231527 726% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.5055096419 51.9672348444 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.66176470588 1.8405768891 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412972182934 0.441005458295 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.149589632213 0.135418324435 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0697049569633 0.0829849096947 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.625342821283 0.58762219726 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.116057418455 0.147661913831 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203122517606 0.193483328276 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802190332269 0.0970749176394 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.556959323642 0.42659136922 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0420101524192 0.0774707102158 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298154278077 0.312017818177 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111655734493 0.0698173142475 160% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.