"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of
accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from
50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents
that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The increase moped traffics and the number of accidents have been closely linked in the given argument and the results of another island has been taken as a foreground for the prediction of the future events in the hope to achieve similar results and decrease the number of accidents. But, there lies too many loopholes in the considerations and the assumptions seems faulty and fails to consider variables other than mopeds. The given premise are incomplete which seriously compromises the conclusions.
First and foremost the author is completely taken by the moped counts that he focuses all of the attentions towards it. We are not given the exact information of how many mopeds were there in the very beginning, we cannot argue by merely a sentence which says the number has reached 100,000 during summer. The increase may be substantial if the previous population was around 50 thousands and the solution may lie in limiting the moped but what if previously there were already 99 thousands and the surge is only 1 thousand which under no means can be considered increase. The author may validate his argument only by providing enough evidence that the population has really increased manifolds by providing the previous numbers, then only limiting the moped population may do the work.
Apart from the moped population the role of the pedestrians in the accidents is completely overlooked. Any limit in the number of mopeds would have no effect if the real cause is the pedestrian and their habits of wandering in the roads. The author simply overlooks the pedestrian assuming they have no hand what so ever in the accidents including them. He may only prove the worth if he had done a pre-study on the impact of pedestrians and vindicate them of the blame, then and then only limiting the moped number would dramatically reduce the accidents.
Moving on from the moped population and the impact of pedestrian the author seriously thinks that limiting the number from 50 per day to 25 per day would result in lesser accidents what if the main reason is the road condition and uncontrolled traffic. Again no research has been performed on road conditions which is a major factor in the road accidents and therefore limiting the moped per day would reduce the accident or not cannot be proven with accuracy completely out casting one major factor. The author, however, may validate his point by setting out a research team on road survey and other variables which could have a real impact on road accidents.
Moving on, one major fallacy of the author is assuming the success of implementation of any new law just on the background that doing so another party has achieved the feat. He turns completely blind and follows what other have done in their island and achieved the success. One can simply not rule out the fact even the slightest change in the scenario has a complete turnaround in any event. So, author cannot simply prove his point without providing concrete evidence the program would be a success in homeland. However, he can emulate the triumph given the all the factors between the two islands remain the same.
In a nutshell, it is easy to say that if one program is a success in one condition and in one state or island the same would be the case everywhere but it is not so. The author cannot simply over-rule the road conditions, the impact road conditions has on the accidents along with the mind state of the pedestrians. The argument seems more like a bombastic and quixotic one but not relevant.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...les other than mopeds. The given premise are incomplete which seriously compromis...
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...ken by the moped counts that he focuses all of the attentions towards it. We are not given...
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...re already 99 thousands and the surge is only 1 thousand which under no means can...
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...50 per day to 25 per day would result in lesser accidents what if the main reason...
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...ch has been performed on road conditions which is a major factor in the road acci...
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...l, it is easy to say that if one program is a success in one condition and in one...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'apart from']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222741433022 0.25644967241 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.157320872274 0.15541462614 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0669781931464 0.0836205057962 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0763239875389 0.0520304965353 147% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0280373831776 0.0272364105082 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123052959502 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0545171339564 0.0416121511921 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61484468851 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00623052959502 0.026700313972 23% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00155763239875 0.001811407834 86% => OK
Determiners: 0.152647975078 0.113004496875 135% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0311526479751 0.0255425247493 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0155763239875 0.0127820249294 122% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3541.0 2731.13054187 130% => OK
No of words: 605.0 446.07635468 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85289256198 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.57801047555 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338842975207 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.242975206612 0.287650121315 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190082644628 0.208842608468 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123966942149 0.135150697306 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61484468851 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 207.018472906 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426446280992 0.469332199767 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.2744604682 52.1807786196 98% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 27.5 23.2022227129 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5485427823 57.7814097925 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.954545455 141.986410481 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 23.2022227129 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 51.7975206612 51.9672348444 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.52976190476 1.8405768891 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519262141062 0.441005458295 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135843254614 0.135418324435 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0798764325932 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.654634591994 0.58762219726 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118670574381 0.147661913831 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.255957516998 0.193483328276 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993680584124 0.0970749176394 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.566406608621 0.42659136922 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0510312298989 0.0774707102158 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.391667523402 0.312017818177 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601127910289 0.0698173142475 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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