"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author attempts to indicate a causal relationship between the number of mopeds rented by the rental companies in the Balmer island and the number of accidents involving mopeds. Specifically, the author advocates a measure to curb the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians in Balmer island, based on the amelioration achieved in a neighbouring island, by adopting ‘identical’ measures. She provides a quantitative recommendation and a prediction of its positive effect on the percent annual reduction in the accidents involving mopeds. As will be substantiated in the following, the author, however, makes an implicit assumption and fails to justify it, that the islands are indeed comparable, to be able to derive conclusions about one on the basis of the observations drawn from another.
The mopeds are described as a ‘popular’ form of transport in the Balmer island, leaving the fact to the speculation on how this view was developed. It also leaves the question about the validity and the scope of this view. Suppose if it was a public view surfacing from a survey, then, what fraction and region of the Balmer island population was engaged in this survey, what was the actual questionnaire etc.
Along the same line of reasoning, assuming that, mopeds are indeed a ‘popular’ mode of transportation, it is cited that during summer, population rises to 100,000. The statement seems to imply a significant growth, but does not mention the initial population, without which one cannot appreciate this phenomenon, even if true. Consequently, it fails to ‘strongly’ buttress the recommendation to reduce the limit on the number of rented mopeds especially during the ‘summer’ season. In addition, it raises the question over the validity of this observation, specifically, over how many summer seasons this phenomenon of the population rise has been ‘consistently’ observed.
Furthermore, the argument does not provide an explicit connection between, the popularity of mopeds, and the summer season. The author needs to explicitly address the question about whether the mopeds are a popular mode of transportation during the summer season too; leaving this connection up for speculation reduces the efficacy of this recommendation.
Even if we decide to take a lax approach towards the above mentioned loopholes in the argument, the quantitative nature of these recommendations and predictions motivates a need for a quantitative comparison between the Balmer and Seaville islands themselves, for this recommendation to be considered at its face value. Specifically, does the Balmer and Seaville islands have similar population, does the moped a popular mode of transportation in the Seaville island too, does the Seaville island also goes through the rise in the population, at similar scale as in the Balmer island during the summer season, etc. The author does not attempt to establish a quantitative equivalence between the two islands but proposes a quantitative recommendation which is identical to the one that supposedly worked in the Seaville island.
I would like to submit that in an attempt to strengthen the casual relation between the number of mopeds rented by the rental companies in the Balmer island and the percent annual reduction in the number of moped accidents, the author needs to address the loopholes in her argument as described above before considering equivalences between the two islands. Even after we assume these logical fallacies to have been resolved, the author should corroborate her quantitative recommendations and predictions with the quantitative evaluation of the equivalence of the two islands over the germane parameters.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
...another. The mopeds are described as a 'popular' form of transport i...
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Suggestion: an
...oning, assuming that, mopeds are indeed a 'popular' mode of transportat...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
... between, the popularity of mopeds, and the summer season. The author needs to explicitly address...
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Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...a popular mode of transportation during the summer season too; leaving this connection up for spe...
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Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ar scale as in the Balmer island during the summer season, etc. The author does not attempt to es...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 97.0 55.5748502994 175% => OK
Nominalization: 38.0 16.3942115768 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3184.0 2260.96107784 141% => OK
No of words: 575.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53739130435 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.49701638965 2.78398813304 126% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431304347826 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1015.2 705.55239521 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1353273971 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.888888889 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9444444444 23.324526521 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361200219576 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123349358306 0.0743258471296 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095081899437 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183094644213 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501154880237 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 14.3799401198 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.09 48.3550499002 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 98.500998004 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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