"The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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The author claims that the people in Forsyth tend to be healthier than in the past years because they follow the nutritional recommendations from the government. The author’s claim loses logic and has many holes and hidden points. There is also a lack of information and provements about what the author provides.
First of all, we all know that some governments try to achieve their aims and use their power to do business and gain huge amounts of money. In the paragraph, the author states that people follow the recommendations which the government provide but he or she does not mention anything about the recommendations.Maybe people in Forsythe follow the instruction from another corporation or group. They might follow the recommendations that provided in a TV program and that help them to enhance their nutritional system.There is not any evidence that the government is behind that improvements if the improvements exist at all.
Second, the author depends his argument on a recent survey but he does not provide any information about the community or group that is responsible about that survey. The survey itself maybe fake and the result not true and that all to make people buy more from the products that contain Kiran. Moreover, the author also claims that a scientific study has said that Kiran helps to reduce cholesterol but again he does not provide any information about the group that is responsible about that study. He does not even provide any details about the study and how much it Kiran help to reduce cholesterol. Kiran maybe reduce the cholesterol level more than need and maybe it does not reduce cholesterol level at all.
Finally, somebody may claims that the reasons I have provided are weak and people becomes healthier than in the past. He might be right but again that does not mean that government's recommendation are the reasons. All the arguments the author provides vague. We do not know Forsythe population and how much the survey and scientific study are accurate. We do not how much people buy sulia. We do not even know if Kiran is the best substance to reduce cholesterol and if it has any other negative effects on human health or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maybe
...tion anything about the recommendations.Maybe people in Forsythe follow the instructi...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...hem to enhance their nutritional system.There is not any evidence that the government...
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Line 5, column 576, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Kiran) must be used with a third-person verb: 'helps'.
Suggestion: helps
...s about the study and how much it Kiran help to reduce cholesterol. Kiran maybe redu...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...right but again that does not mean that governments recommendation are the reasons. All the...
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Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...tific study are accurate. We do not how much people buy sulia. We do not even know i...
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Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e. We do not how much people buy sulia. We do not even know if Kiran is the best s...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239294710327 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.171284634761 0.15541462614 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0705289672544 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0604534005038 0.0520304965353 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0554156171285 0.0272364105082 203% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.103274559194 0.125424944231 82% => OK
Participles: 0.00251889168766 0.0416121511921 6% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.83779237853 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0201511335013 0.026700313972 75% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.128463476071 0.113004496875 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00755667506297 0.0255425247493 30% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0226700251889 0.0127820249294 177% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2196.0 2731.13054187 80% => OK
No of words: 371.0 446.07635468 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91913746631 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.312668463612 0.378187486979 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.204851752022 0.287650121315 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148247978437 0.208842608468 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.11051212938 0.135150697306 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83779237853 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44204851752 0.469332199767 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.7706868755 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8235294118 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6362312266 57.7814097925 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.176470588 141.986410481 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 42.3087046139 51.9672348444 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.20175438596 1.8405768891 65% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247498623993 0.441005458295 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.170802092635 0.135418324435 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.116769475457 0.0829849096947 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559846281668 0.58762219726 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125361735139 0.147661913831 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101601964418 0.193483328276 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653957954752 0.0970749176394 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.500803985711 0.42659136922 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0168335215568 0.0774707102158 22% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186644609818 0.312017818177 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613471602078 0.0698173142475 88% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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