The following appeared in a health magazine.
"The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author states that the citizens of Forsythe are living healthier lifestyles because they adopted a nutrition regime prescribed by the government years ago and also observing the trends in the sales of food products that might indicate the health of the person.
While this might seem plausible, it is rife with many vague assumptions and logical flaws.
Firstly, the scope and validity of the survey are to be questioned. What kind of questions were asked? were they exhaustive or representative? Another important thing to consider is the number of people who were surveyed. For example, if the survey had taken people who go for gym regularly then it will be biased. Thus without knowing the authenticity of the survey, further conclusions are difficult to make.
Secondly, the government nutritional recommendations were given ten years ago. Following that may necessarily not lead to a healthier life. There might have been newer products in he market that was not there in the past which may be more efficient.It is also possible that the government's recommendations were not successful and it is not anymore prescribed by them.
There might be new diet regimes that fit the demand of the present. The lifestyle of past and present may significantly vary. For instance, 10 years back, people might have been involved in the more physical activity and healthy eating, thus requiring less correction in their regime but in present the conditions might have altered. They might have reduced the time they dedicated for exercises because of work load or they indulge in food that contains extra fat and bad cholesterol. Blindly adopting the same course as 10 years ago may be futile, or worse detrimental.
Moreover, the increase in the sales of the product Kiran does not necessarily mean that more people are consuming it. It can be possible that few groups of people are actively buying it while rest of them are not. If an group or organization is buying it in wholesale for selling it for retail or if scientists are ordering in bulk for further studies then it will significantly weaken the argument. Thus the data of customers buying the product and the frequency of it is important. Also, the scope of scientific studyis questionable, whether they did a thorough study or is it an ongoing research? How many subjects were tested for this purpose? etc...
Another major flaw is the assumption that reduced consumption of sulia leads to healthier living. While it may be possible, the healthier citizens might have stoped eating because of various reasons like cost or another competitive product that arrived in the market with better results etc..
In conclusion, the author's claim that citizens of Forsythe have adopted a more healthier lifestyle needs further careful analysis and data to corroborate it. It contains many logical fallacies that needs to be addressed before making a claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Were
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'ongoing research'.
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...at reduced consumption of sulia leads to healthier living. While it may be possib...
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...ed in the market with better results etc.. In conclusion, the authors claim tha...
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Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...hat citizens of Forsythe have adopted a more healthier lifestyle needs further careful analysi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10020876827 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7833374984 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503131524008 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6936459009 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9615384615 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4230769231 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178867783604 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425039539251 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498328948337 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806951630669 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536271435035 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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