The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of this certain letter claims that reducing rental limits for moped-stalls in Balmer Island during summers, whence the population culminates up to a populated 100,000 will reduce the current rate of accidents taking place. The argument tries to pinpoint to a nebulous conclusion based on a slippery slope of unhinged assumptions and we'll be noting them one-by-one.
Firstly, author states that the moped-renting regulation laws that were applied to Seaville last year will be as helpful to Balmer Islands as they were to the former city. However the author fails to entertain the plausible fact that Balmer Islands seems like a vacation spot in summers that accounts for the peak attendance during that time-period; while no information is given regarding Seaville's tourist-acclaimation. Is Seaville a tourist-spot? Is Seaville as known a tourist destination as Balmer Islands? Does it recieve a close, if not equal, share of attendance during the summer?
Secondly, the author fails to provide necessary causes for the accidents in Balmer Islands. For all we know, the accidents could simply take place because of bad road-management and traffic-regulations. Are Balmer Island's roads & traffic-services impeccable?
If not, this would together surely concoct into ambrosia of mishappenings.
Moreover, the author fails to see the flaw in the system of vendors. The moped-rentals might provide their services to underage customers without checking for proof in order to maximize their profit regardless of safety-concerns. This could critically challenge the author's bold assumption.
Lastly, while the author compares the applied laws to Seaville and their effects on the reduction of accidents alike, it fails to take into account the critical causes of accidents.
Where the accidents solely because of mopeds?
Does the geographical terrain of an 'island' fare well with its road-designs?
How does the road-plans of Balmer Islands compare to that of SeaVille? How are the traffic services comparatively?
Perhaps Seaville had a flawless road-plan or to fulfill that area, it also included ameliorating the same; maybe it also improved its traffic-regulation. A lot of factors could've contributed to the successful curb of accidents.
Conclusively, the author could strengthen his argument if he provided some of the requisite details such as, A. provided information of Seaville's hold on tourist-activities & peak attendance data. B. A comparative short-study of Seaville's road-plans and traffic-regulations as opposed to Balmer Islands'. C. Provided data regarding other plans that helped curb Seaville's accident-rates.
Unless the author provides evidentiary support as necessarily mentioned above, the conclusion stays unsubstantiated upon a balance of probability. Reducing the rental-limits does not necessarily mean reduction in accidents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...slands as they were to the former city. However the author fails to entertain the plaus...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... strengthen his argument if he provided some of the requisite details such as, A. provided ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.292993630573 0.25644967241 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.138004246285 0.15541462614 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0700636942675 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0509554140127 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0297239915074 0.0272364105082 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129511677282 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.031847133758 0.0416121511921 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.47111661244 2.79052419416 124% => OK
Infinitives: 0.036093418259 0.026700313972 135% => OK
Particles: 0.00212314225053 0.001811407834 117% => OK
Determiners: 0.114649681529 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0148619957537 0.0255425247493 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127388535032 0.0127820249294 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2870.0 2731.13054187 105% => OK
No of words: 428.0 446.07635468 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.70560747664 6.12365571057 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.460280373832 0.378187486979 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.355140186916 0.287650121315 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.268691588785 0.208842608468 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.182242990654 0.135150697306 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47111661244 2.79052419416 124% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 207.018472906 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556074766355 0.469332199767 118% => OK
Word variations: 65.5420036972 52.1807786196 126% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.039408867 135% => OK
Sentence length: 15.8518518519 23.2022227129 68% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5312828197 57.7814097925 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.296296296 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8518518519 23.2022227129 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 5.14285714286 233% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 51.3658705434 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 2.07766990291 1.8405768891 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.606844761566 0.441005458295 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.093278817197 0.135418324435 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0956633432678 0.0829849096947 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.619015678522 0.58762219726 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.237644551554 0.147661913831 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206400899759 0.193483328276 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134186648417 0.0970749176394 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.197300941431 0.42659136922 46% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.106848795531 0.0774707102158 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306814879261 0.312017818177 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110259430576 0.0698173142475 158% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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