The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument of the editor of a Batavia newspaper attempts to bridge a relationship between the high milk prices for consumers and excessive profits for dairy farms. However it may be true that dairy farms earn a lot of money because of the higher milk prices this letter have to require more information and details. There are certain important questions unanswered and facts unnoticed leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
First of all, the author claims that the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has doubled compared to 10 years ago. However, the author describes a small piece of the whole milk market. In the article, there is nothing written down about the prices farmers have to pay to feed the cows, to maintain milking machines, to pay for milk transport and to pay for medication. In 10 years there is a possibility that those prices increased a lot which makes a higher milk price in the food market plausible. In addition, there is a possibility that the supermarkets make a lot of money instead of the farmers if only the prices in the supermarket increased. Even as the government which could earn money by taxes.
The author claims that prices in Excello Food Market increase from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. He based his argument on the fact that there is an increased price in one supermarket. There is no information available about the prices in other supermarkets. Even as information about the origin of the milk in this supermarket, it may occur that this supermarket buys milk from other countries.
The author noticed that there are 25 percent more dairy farms than there were 10 years ago. An increased amount of farms means also more competition between farmers which lead to lower profits. If there are more farmers the take-off per farmer is lower which indicated lower profits.
In addition, a grow of daily farms over 10 years is quite normal because of the increased population.
So to conclude, the argument lacks information and seems to provide inchoate assumptions. The report has presented more concrete evidence to support the claim and make the argument more cogent. To make his argument more convincing there has to be more information about the overall milk prices related to the profits that farmers make.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... and excessive profits for dairy farms. However it may be true that dairy farms earn a ...
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Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ilk price in the food market plausible. In addition, there is a possibility that t...
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Line 3, column 662, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he prices in the supermarket increased. Even as the government which could earn money b...
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Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmarket buys milk from other countries. The author noticed that there are 25 per...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...en farmers which lead to lower profits. If there are more farmers the take-off per...
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Line 8, column 14, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... indicated lower profits. In addition, a grow of daily farms over 10 years is quite n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, as to, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89743589744 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61620902039 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448717948718 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4871617191 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.5 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104934790145 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375290645758 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608877699752 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0640283223131 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429897149429 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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